Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graphs show the layout of the university sports centre now ;and how it till will look after redevelopment

First of all l talk about the university sports centre [present] When enter the university sports center reception are there and the right side seating room or the left side of the reception changing room are there Back side of the reception 25 m pool are there and back side of the 25 m gym are there and both side of the changing room and seating out door courts are there that is the university sports centre (PRESENT) I ALSO explain completely

Now i talk about the university sports center (Future plans) when enter the sports center I will see reception place or the left side of the i will see sports shop and back side of the sports shop changing room or right side of the reception will see cafe shop and backside changing room are there in future Back side of the reception 25 m pool are there or 25 m pool left side in future i will see the changing room and the right side 25 m pool seating room and sports hall or the right side of sports hall dance studio back side gym room are there

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the two maps, but it fails to provide a clear overview or a structured comparison. The writing is highly repetitive and lacks a professional tone, often reading like a stream-of-consciousness narration rather than an analytical report. While the student identifies some features, the lack of clear grouping and the absence of a summary of the main changes (such as the expansion of facilities) mean the task is only partially addressed. The inclusion of personal commentary like 'I ALSO explain completely' is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 response, which requires an objective, formal tone.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks logical organization and paragraphing. There is no clear progression of ideas; instead, the student jumps between locations in a confusing manner. Cohesive devices are almost entirely absent, and the use of 'and' to connect long, run-on clauses makes the text difficult to follow. The referencing is unclear, as the student frequently uses 'there are' or 'I will see' without establishing a clear spatial perspective. The lack of transition words or logical sequencing significantly hinders the flow of information, making it difficult for the reader to visualize the changes described.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is extremely limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic directional language ('right side', 'left side', 'back side') and simple verbs ('see', 'talk', 'look'). There is no attempt to use precise vocabulary related to maps or urban planning, such as 'situated', 'adjacent to', 'transformed', or 'extended'. Furthermore, the phrasing is often unnatural and informal. The lack of variety in word choice and the inability to use descriptive language to convey spatial relationships prevent the response from reaching a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is consistently weak, with frequent errors in sentence structure, punctuation, and tense usage. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences used are often grammatically incorrect (e.g., '25 m pool are there'). Punctuation is largely ignored, with random semicolons and missing periods. The misuse of tenses—mixing present and future in a way that does not accurately reflect the task—further complicates the meaning. The high frequency of basic grammatical errors and the lack of control over sentence boundaries make the text difficult to read.

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