Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In the start up we discuss the present condition of university sports center who have the first is reception which is 25m pool the west side of reception is changing room and the east side is seating then after the last is north side is gym.
The future construction plan about the university sports center is that when you enter from the main gate the start up west side is sport shop ther existing room is changing room and the west side of the reception is cafe and changing room the centers of the cafe and shop is reception is 25m pool and there is mandotry room whos is the present is changing room is common and the left side the leisure pool beside the changing room and the east side of reception is couple of dance studio attached with sports hall and the north is gym same as the above present sports center
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the two maps, but it fails to provide a clear, logical summary of the main features. The description is confusing and lacks a structured approach, such as comparing the 'before' and 'after' states clearly. Many details are muddled, such as the location of the reception and the pool, making it difficult for the reader to visualize the changes. The response lacks an overview, which is a critical requirement for Task 1. Consequently, the information is not presented in a way that highlights the key changes effectively, resulting in a fragmented and unclear report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical organization. It is written in two long, run-on paragraphs that do not follow a clear sequence. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the progression of information is disjointed. The use of referencing is poor, making it hard to follow which part of the map is being described at any given time. The lack of clear paragraphing and the absence of logical signposting mean that the reader struggles to follow the writer's train of thought throughout the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The writer relies on basic directional language ('west side', 'east side', 'north side') and struggles to describe the features of the sports centre accurately. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'In the start up' and 'mandotry room', which indicate a lack of control over word choice and spelling. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the spatial relationships and changes in the layout with any degree of precision or sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors that often impede communication. There are many run-on sentences and a lack of proper punctuation, which makes the text difficult to parse. The sentence structures are simplistic and often grammatically incorrect, such as 'who have the first is reception' and 'whos is the present is changing room'. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the high frequency of basic grammatical errors significantly affects the clarity of the report.
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