Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The map shows univercity present and future plane. how to devolape univercity sports center in future.
In the present map there have reception in front of south side,in the oposite north side there have Gym. In the west side have changing room and outdoor courts, east side have seating and also outdoor couts. and the middel part have 25m pool.
In the future plans of university sports centre show some modification. show the the middel part 25m pool r not change and also reception, Gym, seating, changing room also not change but there some modification. In the reception west side ther add in sports shop and changing room. in the oposite side of reception add cafe and changing room in the east south side. In the wast side future plans add lasure pool and the other side of there add sports hall and also add dance studio.
In my opnion and i show the plan betuine present and future the there have some modificition and add some thing in present to future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to describe the features of the university sports centre before and after redevelopment. However, the response falls short of fully satisfying the task requirements for an Academic Task 1. Key features such as the 25m pool, reception, and gym are mentioned, but comparisons are poorly articulated, and the overview required for a high score is missing. The student states 'In my opnion and i show the plan betuine present and future', which is inappropriate for an academic report as it expresses personal opinion. Furthermore, the description contains inaccuracies regarding the spatial layout and new additions, such as the leisure pool and sports hall. This places the response firmly within Band 5, as the task is addressed only partially with limited development.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is divided into basic paragraphs corresponding to the introduction, present layout, future plan, and a concluding remark. However, there is no clear overall progression or logical structure guiding the reader through the visual data. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, and frequently misused, such as 'In the oposite north side' and 'on the other side of there'. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to follow which specific areas of the map are being discussed. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion of sentences and paragraphs is weak. These features align with the Band 4 descriptor, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently, though some overall structure is discernible.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on fundamental terms like 'reception', 'gym', 'pool', and 'changing room'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'univercity' for university, 'plane' for plan, 'devolape' for develop, 'oposite' for opposite, 'middel' for middle, 'wast' for west, 'lasure' for leisure, 'opnion' for opinion, 'betuine' for between, and 'modificition' for modification. These spelling mistakes and lexical limitations severely restrict precision and cause strain for the reader. The range of vocabulary is inadequate for an academic response, corresponding to Band 4, where basic and repetitive vocabulary results in errors that strain comprehension.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and heavily flawed sentence structures. There is a persistent absence of correct verb forms and auxiliary verbs, as seen in 'In the present map there have reception' and 'in the west side have changing room'. Complex sentence structures are absent, and basic punctuation is frequently mishandled. Errors occur in almost every sentence and frequently impede communication, forcing the reader to guess the intended meaning. This performance matches the Band 4 descriptor, characterized by a very limited range of structures and frequent errors that distort meaning.
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