Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The picture is showing the layout of the university cucurriculum and afetr the construction how its looks.
Overall , the university sports center present look is the left side the outdoor courts and in between the hall that include the reception left on the reception is changing room and right side is the seating area in the middle the swimming pool there and behind the pool the gym is there. and in the east of the hall the outdoor courts.
As we can be seen that , the new plan of the sports senter is have the alots of things such as include the leisure pool on the west and the changing room is extend to three and the sports shop , cafe , two dance studio include in the plan and the sports hall is also included in the future plan of the university sports centre is its is best plan to the present beacuse in this plans the student have more facilities in the university.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the two diagrams showing the present and future layouts of the university sports centre, mentioning elements such as the outdoor courts, swimming pool, and gym, alongside proposed changes like the leisure pool, sports shop, cafe, and dance studios. However, the task achievement is severely hindered by significant omissions, lack of clear organisation, and an overwhelming number of inaccurate spatial descriptions. The writer fails to provide a coherent overview or make structured comparisons as requested by the task prompt. Sentences like 'the university sports center present look is the left side the outdoor courts' demonstrate a failure to clearly report the visual data. Consequently, the response falls into the Band 4 descriptor, as it only responds to the task minimally and tangentially.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The coherence and cohesion of the text are extremely weak, preventing any logical progression of ideas. The response lacks effective paragraphing, with the main body consisting of a single, run-on, highly convoluted sentence filled with fragmented clauses such as 'and in the east of the hall the outdoor courts' and 'and behind the pool the gym is there'. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, relying excessively on repetitive conjunctions like 'and' to string unrelated clauses together. Reference pronouns are unclear, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships described in the maps. This performance aligns closely with the Band 4 descriptors, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently and progression is absent.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used throughout the response is basic, highly repetitive, and often inaccurate. The student uses simple words and makes numerous severe word-choice and spelling errors, such as 'cucurriculum' instead of curriculum, 'afetr' instead of after, 'senter' instead of centre, and 'alots of things' instead of a lot of things. There is no attempt to use less common lexical items appropriately, and terms specific to map interpretation (such as layout, situated, or transformed) are absent. Because the lexical range is extremely limited and errors frequently strain the reader and obscure meaning, this performance warrants a Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range and accuracy are severely compromised by a lack of basic sentence structure. The text consists largely of poorly constructed, run-on simple and compound sentences linked incorrectly by coordinating conjunctions. There is a complete absence of error-free sentences, with persistent errors in verb tenses ('is showing', 'afetr the construction how its looks'), subject-verb agreement ('the new plan... is have'), and prepositions. Punctuation is also misused or omitted entirely, such as erratic spacing around commas. These frequent, fundamental errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and distort meaning, placing the grammar squarely at Band 4.
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