Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given below plans shows the layout of universitys sports centre now and the how it will look after redevelopment.
overall this the shows the universitys sports centr now and how it will look in future after making the changes in infrastructer.
At present from the entrance reception is there but in future there will be cafe at east side and sports shop at west side and changing rooms both corner of sports center beside reception there is a 25m pool that will be as it is in future and changing room on west side of pool and seating on east will be at same place in the future.
The place that will be expanded at present there is a outdoors couts on both the side after redevlopment on east sports hall and 2 dance studio will be added on west of the pool leisure pool will be added beside changing room.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the current and future university sports centre layouts, noting key elements such as the 25m pool remaining unchanged, the expansion into outdoor court areas, and the addition of new facilities like a leisure pool, sports hall, dance studios, and a café. However, the information is presented in a somewhat disjointed manner, and certain details are imprecise or slightly mislocated. For instance, the description of the changing rooms and cafe locations lacks spatial clarity. Overall, it addresses the general task requirements but lacks the clear, well-structured overview and precise feature selection expected for higher bands, placing it solidly at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The text suffers from significant organizational and mechanical issues. There is no proper paragraph structure; the response consists of very short, fragmented blocks and a confusing introduction split awkwardly across two lines. Cohesive devices are minimal and often misused (e.g., 'At present from the entrance reception is there...'). Logical progression between the present layout and the future plans is difficult to follow due to run-on sentences and a lack of clear transition markers. Paragraphing is not used effectively to separate different areas or timeframes of the map, resulting in a cohesive score of 4.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
Lexical range is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic vocabulary such as 'pool', 'sports centre', 'gym', and 'changing room', often repeating them multiple times ('changing room... changing room'). There are numerous spelling errors ('universitys', 'centr', 'infrastructer', 'couts', 'redevlopment') and awkward word choices or collocations, such as 'outdoors couts on both the side'. While the meaning is occasionally retrievable, the frequent errors and restricted range constrain the score to Band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is plagued by basic sentence structure errors, missing verbs, and severe punctuation issues (such as starting sentences with lowercase letters and missing terminal punctuation in places). Examples include 'The given below plans shows...' (incorrect word order and subject-verb agreement error) and 'overall this the shows the universitys sports centr now...'. Complex structures are attempted very poorly, resulting in fragmented or run-on sentences like 'At present from the entrance reception is there but in future...'. Frequent grammatical errors severely impede fluency and readability, yielding a score of 4.0.
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