Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The process begins with Universty sports centre.

Before On north gym,On west changing room,and on east seating.And On south reception

present.After that on the centre a 25m pool present.And On sides coutdoors present.After that

Some universty sports centre by future plans which are Starts from the Reception.And On the

north gym present.On the west changing room present.On the centre ppol present.A separate seating hall present.And on

east Sports halls is present.And a cafe is present in the east.And on West dance studio is

present.And separates Leisrue Pool present.And On West Sports shop present.And cafe is present in east.And on west sports shops present.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under-length, containing only 103 words against the required 150-word minimum. This severely impacts task achievement, as the student cannot fully develop or cover all the main features of the two maps. While the text attempts to list some features of the present and future sports centre (such as the gym, pool, and changing rooms), the description is fragmented, repetitive, and lacks an overall summary or clear comparisons. Key developments like the expansion into the outdoor courts and the addition of the new facilities are poorly reported. Because of the severe length penalty and incomplete content coverage, this performance falls into Band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks proper paragraphing, consisting of a series of broken, disjointed sentences and fragments rather than a cohesive report. Logical progression is absent; the student jumps randomly between present and future features without clear transitional markers or a coherent organisational structure. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive sentence openings such as 'And on...' creating a list-like, choppy effect that makes the overall progression difficult to follow. This level of organisation aligns with Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and restricted to fundamental terms directly copied from the prompt, such as 'gym', 'pool', 'reception', and 'changing room'. There are also spelling errors like 'Universty', 'coutdoors', 'ppol', and 'Leisrue'. The student fails to demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to discuss spatial changes, locations, or transformations effectively. Lexical choice is limited and repetitive throughout the response, corresponding to Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is very weak. The response contains numerous fragments rather than complete sentences (e.g., 'Before On north gym,On west changing room,and on east seating.'). There is a complete lack of complex sentence structures, and basic subject-verb-object patterns are frequently broken or malformed. Punctuation and capitalization are erratic. Due to the very limited range of structures and frequent errors that strain the reader's understanding, the grammar is characteristic of Band 4.0.

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