Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The provided maps illustrate the layout of a univrsity's sport center is current and its look after redevelopment in the future.
Overall, the previous university sports centre will be moderanised in the furure and the addition of more facilities for students. For instance, cafe and two new extra changing rooms in the furure plan .and also leisure pool and sprts hall will be included. All sports centre was completely changed in upcoming time.
Looking at the details,the reception, changing room,seating area and gym and pool will be unchanged in the future plans. And the south-west corner the addition of changing room and opposite side east-west corner also changing room and the north-east side two dance studio were including in the future plans. Moreover, the entrance left side sports shop and right side cafe have include. Furthermore in the center sports hall and the north-west hand a leisure pool have inclunded in future plans. All university sports centre was a new look in future
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main changes shown in the maps, noting that several features like the reception, seating area, gym, and pool remain, while new additions such as a leisure pool, sports hall, dance studios, and a sports shop are introduced. However, there are significant inaccuracies in spatial reporting and feature identification (for example, misidentifying the locations of changing rooms and the sports shop/café placement relative to the plan). The overview is simplistic and repetitive. While it attempts to address the prompt, the lack of precision and under-developed comparison places it at Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into short paragraphs, including an introduction, a fragmented body, and a brief concluding sentence. However, the logical progression is weak and the overall arrangement is disjointed. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or mechanically forced (e.g., 'Looking at the details', 'Moreover', 'Furthermore'). Additionally, referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow spatial relationships between the various features on the map. This corresponds to a Band 5 level of coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The student demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary with frequent spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'univrsity's', 'sport center', 'moderanised', 'furure', and 'sprts hall'. While some task-specific vocabulary is attempted ('redevelopment', 'facilities', 'reception'), the high frequency of basic misspellings and inaccurate collocations ('north-west hand', 'have include') impedes clear communication and causes strain for the reader, fitting the Band 4 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay exhibits a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple clauses and faulty attempts at complex or passive constructions (e.g., 'two dance studio were including', 'a leisure pool have inclunded'). Grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, including tense confusion ('is current and its look after redevelopment in the future'), missing articles, and subject-verb agreement issues. These persistent errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader, aligning with Band 4.
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