Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

As we can see the map of present we can clearly see that the construction is incomplete but when the construction will be completed. The university will look good where a student enter through the gate See's the reception area where the student can find the information or admission procedure or query related to the university ater on the right side we can see that there a cafe where student can get refreshment and can change the clothes in case students want to swim along we can see that i outdoor the students have leisure pool where the students can relax and spend the time with their friends also there is a gym where students can exercise and change their clothes next to room of gym. along there is two dance studio i assume one is for the girls and one is for the boys where students can dance practice seperatly

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the university sports centre maps, but it struggles significantly with format, tone, and accuracy. Instead of providing an academic summary of the main features and comparisons between the present and future layouts, the writer adopts an informal, conversational narrative style ('As we can see...', 'i assume one is for the girls and one is for the boys'). Furthermore, the interpretation of the visual data is flawed; the text misidentifies features (calling the new western addition a leisure pool when it replaces outdoor courts, and inventing gender-segregated uses for the dance studios). Because key features are misreported and the academic register is missing, this falls well short of the requirements for higher bands.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text suffers from severe issues with cohesion and paragraphing. The entire 151-word response is written as a single, massive run-on sentence containing numerous clauses linked loosely by conjunctions ('and when...', 'where the student...', 'ater on...', 'along we can see...'). There is a complete lack of proper punctuation, full stops, and paragraph division, making the text extremely difficult to read and follow. While chronological or spatial progression is attempted, the absence of basic structural boundaries and clear cohesive devices means the response lacks logical organisation.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and restricted to everyday terms ('student', 'gym', 'pool', 'change', 'dance'). There are several spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'ater on', 'seperatly', and awkward phrasing like 'change the clothes'. Attempts to use less common or descriptive language are either inaccurate or inappropriate for an academic task. The lexical range is barely adequate to communicate the basic ideas, resulting in a low score for this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatically, the response is severely limited and inaccurate. The entire text consists of a single run-on sentence punctuated only by commas, demonstrating a complete lack of control over sentence boundaries and punctuation. There are numerous grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('where a student enter', 'there a cafe'), missing articles, and faulty clause structures. Because the writing lacks independent, grammatically sound sentences, it falls into the lowest bands for grammatical accuracy and range.

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