Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The fugure illustarte the layout of a university sports center now,and how it will look after re-construct .

Now we should compare the both images . There is a present plan and future plan of a university sports centre .So now the sports center look like there is outdoor courts on west and also in East .When we enter there is a reception and on a left side there is a changing room and on right side there are seating arrangement in addition in last we can see a gym basically the gym is on north direction and now comparatively the second image illustrate that there is a reception when we enter on the west it is sports shop and more west it is changng room and beside entrence on east way it is cafe and changing room back side of reception there is 25m pool and on west there is big changing room and more west there os leisture pool on the east of pool it is seating area beside sports hall more east there 2 dance studio and the gym at the same place as above on the last at north direction

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover both the present and future plans of the university sports centre, identifying major changes such as the expansion into former outdoor courts to add a leisure pool, sports hall, dance studios, and a café. However, the task achievement is heavily compromised by conversational framing and poor structuring. The writer spends too much time on meta-commentary like "Now we should compare the both images" instead of directly reporting features. Furthermore, the description of locations is sometimes confusing, and some details are imprecise. While the student does identify several key transformations, the lack of a clear, unified overview and the disorganized delivery place this at band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Coherence and cohesion are weak areas in this response. The essay is presented as one massive, unbroken paragraph with virtually no punctuation or proper sentence boundaries, running entirely on comma splices and conjunctions like "and" and "so now". There is a severe lack of logical progression, making it difficult for the reader to follow a clear spatial route across the maps. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in a mechanical and jumbled flow of ideas. Paragraphing is entirely absent. These issues align closely with the descriptors for Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling mistakes throughout the text (e.g., "fugure" for figure, "illustarte" for illustrate, "re-construct" for reconstruction, "changng" for changing, "entrence" for entrance, "os" for is, "leisture" for leisure). The writer attempts some topic-specific vocabulary related to the maps such as "reception", "changing room", and "leisure pool", but the lexical range is severely limited. Word choices are frequently awkward and lack the precision required for Academic Task 1. This performance fits the Band 4.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited. The response consists almost entirely of a single run-on sentence connected by coordinating conjunctions, completely lacking proper periods, capitalisation at sentence beginnings, and accurate punctuation. There is a total absence of complex structures handled with control. Basic grammatical errors, tense confusion, and poor syntactic formulation are pervasive throughout the text. Because meaning is frequently obscured by the lack of structural boundaries and grammatical control, the writing satisfies the criteria for Band 4.0.

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