Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

these diagrams illusrate the university sport gym center now and after the reconstruction in future it contains a lots of new changings moreover it will become more advance in future . in the enterence we see a reception when moving left side there is a sitting area behind this is a sport hall .in forant off sport hall there are two dancing studios .opposite to the sport hall is a changing room and also a cafe in future there is a leisure pool behind the pool changing room. when come out the leisure pool there ia a leisure changing room in addition beside the changing room is sport shop.in the north there is a gym in east there tere are two dance studios in west the new thing is a leisure pool as we see in present there are two outdoors out of the sport center but in future there is no out door in the outdoors we construct some we places

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify that the plans show the centre before and after redevelopment, and you mention several genuine additions, including the leisure pool, sports shop, café and dance studios. However, the main changes are only partly reported, and some locations are inaccurate or unclear. For example, you say the sports hall is “behind” the seating and that a changing room is opposite it, whereas the future plan places the sports hall east of the seating and the new changing room in the south-east. The central 25m pool and the facilities that remain in their original positions are not clearly described. A clearer overview of the expansion and the replacement of outdoor courts would make the key features more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to describe locations and changes in sequence, using phrases such as “when moving left side,” “in the north,” and “in addition.” These help signal that you are comparing parts of the plans. However, the response is presented as one long, loosely connected sequence, with no clear overview or paragraphing to separate the present layout from the future one. Several transitions are difficult to follow, and references such as “behind this” and “opposite to the sport hall” do not make the relationships between facilities clear. Organise the response into an introduction and overview, followed by a paragraph on the current plan and one on the redevelopment, using precise location links.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a plan, including “reconstruction,” “reception,” “leisure pool,” “changing room,” and “outdoors.” This gives you a basic range of task-related terms. However, spelling errors and imprecise or repeated wording sometimes make the description harder to understand, as in “illusrate,” “enterence,” “dancing studios,” and “new changings.” Some expressions are also unnatural for this task, such as “it will become more advance” and “when come out the leisure pool.” Aim for accurate facility names and standard map language, such as “is located to the east of” or “will be added.” Proofreading spelling and choosing more precise terms would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses and location phrases, for example, “when moving left side” and “as we see in present,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and the longer sequences are often difficult to parse. Errors in articles, verb forms, agreement and sentence boundaries occur throughout: “there is a reception when moving left side” lacks a clear grammatical subject for the movement, while “in future there is no out door” has an awkward tense and article pattern. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, making sentence boundaries unclear. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use consistent present and future forms when comparing the two plans.

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