Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the spite of argriculture is huge issue of people because arround from hungry even this fiels had been backword.there are indivduals are financial not atabled wherever how to grow up however maintenancs.

overall, this is international problems, inadditions incresed the pouplation will have been increased rapidly.wherever individuals invents new technologies thay were not intrested to the this fields.

in the whole world huge land not be used in preoperd because of dessert and dipped knowledge of the crops.almost 30% land had been proped works there would be not a big things for economic developments.

Althrough the file of villages peoples is hardest due to farming . there are farmer should be use the technologys and made green filds arrounds the villeges because thare was provides the food and clean the enviroments , morever neat enviroments are curical necissary for hralths.

In my propestives , all the delemma occured siginaficant informations of the farmaing till 35% individuals alonged to urban area.thosre have ben cannot use advanced things in agricutures informations.

the governments should be assist in this fields beacus there are very essential for upgrading the growth of all types of fields even each parts are seek and engeged infomed innest parts of landcape.

all over the world facing the incressing populations because however cannot provides the essential food of properily.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You make a limited attempt to address both questions: you mention possible causes, including poverty, population growth and limited use of agricultural technology, and suggest government assistance and improved farming. However, these points are difficult to interpret and are not explained with clear cause-and-effect reasoning or relevant examples. For instance, the claim that “30% land” is prepared for work is unclear, and the proposed actions do not explain how they would reduce hunger. The response therefore addresses the task only minimally. It also contains 221 words, so it does not meet the required minimum of 250. Develop two or three clear causes and practical solutions, explaining each with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to separate ideas into paragraphs and to signal connections with phrases such as “overall,” “morever” and “in my propestives.” You also move broadly from causes to possible responses. However, the ideas are not arranged in a clear, coherent progression: the discussion shifts between population, unused land, village farming and government support without showing how these points connect. Several linking expressions are inaccurate or do not clarify the relationship between sentences, and references such as “this fields” are unclear. Plan one paragraph for causes and another for solutions, then use straightforward links such as “One reason is…” and “To address this…” to make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary related to the topic, including “population,” “technologies,” “economic developments” and “governments,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the usable range is basic and many spelling and word-choice errors strain understanding, as in “argriculture,” “backword,” “dessert” and “curical.” Some combinations are also unclear or unnatural, such as “dipped knowledge of the crops” and “clean the enviroments.” Build a reliable set of topic words and check their spelling and collocations. Prefer precise phrases such as “limited agricultural knowledge,” “arable land” and “modern farming methods,” and use them in clear sentences rather than attempting several uncertain expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express connected and complex ideas, for example by using “because” and “even,” but sentence structures are very limited in control. Frequent problems with sentence formation, verb forms, agreement, articles and plurals make meaning difficult to follow. In “there are indivduals are financial not atabled,” the clause structure is incomplete, while “the governments should be assist” uses an incorrect verb pattern. The final sentence, “all over the world facing the incressing populations,” also lacks a clear subject and correctly formed verb. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then join them with one clear subordinate clause. Check that each sentence has a subject and verb, and review verb patterns such as “should assist” and “should be assisted.”

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