Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Hunger is one the major problem for the humanity. Despite, agriculture has been evolving people will be struck by famine. It may seems one the problem has been solved. Also, some people haven't realise there are many people are overwhelmed by hunger.

In lately, Hunger is becoming one of the major issue for humanity. The reason is that might be unbelievable. For instance, people whos' living in the poor country is having problem with an agriculture. Or there are some place where war has been made in several country can't make agriculture and unavailable to afford food. People like billionares are not facing with this while others dying with suffer. This standard of living is making social stratification which leads to imbalanced society.

Even so, we still can fight with our hungers. One of the best that you could do is charity. It doesn't have to be colossal. However, if we give away a single dollar it will be more than billions of dollars. Therefore, we still kept someone life. Most people don't know how hunger really felt. You may wonder having no meal for over 12 hours is your experience. But, in truth people who has been stricken by famine had non-eating by couple weeks. Consequently, they're dying little by little with sorrow. I believe dying with hunger is one of the worst death that you can have.

In conclusion, once we are humans, we end up needs human. Thus, we know it's our humanity; so, for our earth, animals and ourselves we must give a hand as possible as we can!

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you identify poverty and conflict as reasons people lack food, and you propose charity as a response. These are relevant starting points, and the contrast between wealthy people and those facing famine helps show the seriousness of the issue. However, the explanation remains limited: the link between agricultural advances and hunger is not clearly explored, and the claim that poor countries have “problem with an agriculture” needs a more specific explanation. The solution is also narrow and focused mainly on individual donations, with little discussion of broader measures such as aid distribution, reducing food waste, or supporting farming. Develop each cause and solution with a clear explanation or example, and state your position more directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, a paragraph about causes, a paragraph about solutions, and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic route through the answer. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the opening repeats the idea that hunger is a major problem, while the causes paragraph moves from agriculture to war and then social stratification without fully explaining the links. Some connectors, including “Even so,” “Therefore,” and “Consequently,” are used, but the relationships they signal are not always clear or logical. The conclusion introduces a broad appeal to humanity rather than drawing together the causes and proposed actions. Organise each body paragraph around one main point and use clearer links between explanation and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “famine,” “social stratification,” and “imbalanced society,” and these choices show an effort to discuss the issue beyond basic terms. However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “problem,” “people,” and “hunger,” and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts difficult to understand. For example, “fight with our hungers,” “kept someone life,” and “dying with suffer” do not express the intended meanings naturally. There are also spelling and word-form errors, such as “billionares” and “whos’.” Build a more precise set of topic phrases and check that each verb and noun combination is idiomatic; this will make your ideas clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some attempts at complex sentences, including “if we give away a single dollar…” and the sentence beginning “However,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure, agreement, verb forms, and articles occur frequently enough to make several sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “It may seems,” “people who has been stricken,” and “once we are humans, we end up needs human.” Some sentence boundaries and punctuation also make the meaning less clear, particularly in the opening and conclusion. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “although,” and “if.” Check subject–verb agreement and verb forms carefully when revising.

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