Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

With the industrial revolution and innovation in technology, the agriculture department has undergone advancements, like development of advanced machines, agricultural robotics, biotechnology and genomic selection etc. But a chunk of world population is still starving because of unavailabity of food. This essay discusses the possible reasons and solutions to this systematic discrimination in food division.

The foremost reason of hungerness even after agricultural advancements is the unequal distribution of wealth. The capitalist class controls the whole world. It takes the advantages from labours and give them lower wages. The money that labours get, is not enough to provide food to large family members.

Second reason can be the increasing population. The world population has seen a drastic increase after COVID-19. The consumption rate has increased outweighing the production rate. So, people around the world specifically in africa and asia are affected the most. For instance, a woman in Rawanda has to keep herself hungry two times a day in order to feed her children. Therefore, increasing population has added fuel to fire.

The other reason is climate change. The advances in agriculture are in terms of advanced machines and seeds, but the climate change has been overlooked. The erratic rains, droughts, and wildfires have affected the crops devastatingly, increasing the rate of hungerness.

Last but not the least, water scarcity. Due to water scarcity poor countriesare in peril of paralysis, as there is not enough water for food production. In water scarce areas, the is a high risk of droughts. For instance, the droughts in african countries has reduced agricultural production, so people are starving. These problems can be solved technically.

First, the division of the wealth should be equal. All the people of the world should have an access to the resources.

Secondly, the population should be controlled by international collaboration. The production rate should be high enough to fulfill the requirements of all the people in the world.

There is an urgent need to control climate change. World is badly getting affected by it, but the poors are getting affected the most. There is also an urgency to control the waste of water, so that it can be saved to use to grow crops and eliminate the hunger from the world.

In conclusion, despite advances in agricultre, many people in the world are starving. There is an urgent need of international collaboration.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions by identifying several causes—unequal wealth, population growth, climate change and water scarcity—and proposing responses such as fairer resource access, population control and water conservation. The examples about a woman in Rwanda and drought in African countries help make the discussion relevant. However, some explanations are asserted rather than fully demonstrated: for example, the claim that population rose drastically after COVID-19 and now outpaces food production needs clearer support, and the link between low wages and hunger could be explained more precisely. The solutions are also brief; explain how international cooperation or better distribution would reduce hunger in practice. Your conclusion restates the issue but does not summarise the main causes or proposed actions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for causes, a section on solutions and a conclusion. Sequencing is generally easy to follow, and signposts such as “Second reason,” “The other reason” and “In conclusion” make the stages visible. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some stronger control through paragraphing and a logical cause-to-solution progression. However, the transitions can feel mechanical, and “These problems can be solved technically” abruptly introduces the solutions after the discussion of water scarcity. The paragraph beginning “First, the division of the wealth” also moves quickly between proposals without developing their links. Use more natural transitions and clearer references to connect each solution to the specific cause it addresses.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the topic, including terms such as “biotechnology,” “genomic selection,” “erratic rains,” “water scarcity” and “international collaboration.” These choices show an effort to use topic-specific and less common vocabulary, and the main ideas remain understandable. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, however: “hungerness” is not the usual noun, “takes the advantages from labours” is awkward, and “peril of paralysis” does not clearly express the intended danger. There are also spelling errors, including “unavailabity,” “Rawanda” and “agricultre.” Aim for precise, natural combinations and check spelling; this will make your argument sound more fluent without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including cause-and-effect clauses such as “Due to water scarcity…” and a relative clause in “the money that labours get.” Meaning is generally clear, but some grammatical errors remain across the response. For example, “It takes the advantages … and give them lower wages” has a subject–verb agreement problem and inconsistent verb forms; “a woman … has to keep herself hungry two times a day” has an awkward grammatical construction; and “the is a high risk” contains an article/word-order error. There are also issues with articles and plurals in phrases such as “the world population” and “the poors.” Review agreement, articles and sentence construction, then proofread each sentence for a complete and consistent grammatical pattern.

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