Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, yearly 20 million population increaseing in the world. Some people think advances technology made in agriculture, however many people around the world still go hungry. For reasons, over population signifcantly impact.

On the one hand, in africa there population incresed every year more than 2 million. But they also still hungry because they have not enough food for meal. For example, last three years ago china was donated there advances agriculture technology south africa for there development but they still suffer hungry for reason over populate. This country are develop econmoically every year, however they did not come back. Every year, more than 1 million childran death for with out food.

On the other hand, if government and also support international child care organization they totally come back. Todays, world are very modern like Japan, south korea they used modern technology for agriculture. And also maintain there food ability. In may suggeation if goverment use develop technology there agriculture sector they increase there food supply and day by day they recover there food demand. For instance, in Bangladesh approximately 10 years ago they suffer food problem for undevelop technology, but todays totally increase our food demand. Furthermore, government also support local farmer and donated agriculture eqquipment. That's for people recover there problem with out any issue.

In conclusion, although advances technology made in agriculture easily, but many people around the world still go hungry, because over population. If government reduce over population that ca n improve there country and economy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions: overpopulation is offered as a cause, and government investment in agricultural technology and support for farmers are proposed as responses. The Bangladesh example also attempts to illustrate how improved technology can increase food supply. However, the explanation is limited and sometimes unclear: the discussion of Africa and South Africa does not clearly show how population growth leads to hunger despite agricultural advances, and the proposed measures are not developed in enough detail. The conclusion focuses on reducing population, which is not explained as fully as the technology and farmer-support solutions. The response is 15 words below the 250-word minimum; the 16 words copied from the task prompt are not included in the count. Develop each main point with a clear explanation and relevant, precise support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the cause and solutions, and a conclusion. Connectors such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” “For example,” and “Furthermore” help signal the intended relationships between points. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the shift from China’s donation to South Africa to claims about economic development and child deaths is not clearly connected. Some linking phrases are also used mechanically, and references such as “they,” “there,” and “this country” do not always make the intended subject clear. To improve, organise each paragraph around one main idea and use explicit references and logical links to show how each example supports it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “agriculture technology,” “food supply,” “food demand,” and “local farmer,” so the reader can identify the subject and your main proposals. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “recover there food demand,” “maintain there food ability,” and “come back” when describing recovery from hunger. Spelling errors, including “over populate,” “econmoically,” and “eqquipment,” also reduce accuracy. Aim to learn common topic collocations and check word forms and spelling. More precise expressions would help you explain causes and solutions without relying repeatedly on general words such as “problem” and “increase.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences using “however,” “because,” and “if,” but control is inconsistent, and many sentences contain errors that make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Examples include “Nowadays, yearly 20 million population increaseing in the world,” “they have not enough food,” and “This country are develop econmoically every year.” These show problems with sentence formation, verb forms, agreement, and articles. The conclusion also contains an incomplete or unclear construction: “If government reduce over population that ca n improve there country and economy.” Build accuracy first with clear subject–verb–object sentences, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement and tense. Punctuation and sentence boundaries also need more consistent control.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.