Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.
Why is this the case?
What can be done about this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Many people discuss having advance technology around the globe, many people still go hungry due to lack of infrastructure in the foundation of feed poor people which they scam donation money, which am going to discuss further paragraph with reasons and relevant examples.
On one hand, many people donate money to foundation which run to feed poor people who are in need but their are some foundation company who scam people just advertising they need money to feed poor people. For example 2 years back i was working in foundation company which feed poor people i have seen workers of the foundation people scam the people money who funded to them.
On other hand, to problem to the solution who are trying to start foundation first they need ask permission to the government, after that they need to check to the foundation company are genuine than after grant them permission moreover foundation also have to show balance sheet where money has spend. The higher authority people assign government officer if any foundation are trying scam or not people who are send donation money, it also make a impact and in the foundation worker start to work genuine also in their heart get fear if their start to scam people donation money
In my opinion their are people who want to feed and the reason people who donate money because in their busy life work life and family they do not have time feed poor people so they try go through foundation also people scam the money not going in proper use, also the people also lacking trust on foundation company
In conclusion people are still go hungry because their inside foundation company scam donation people money if government make a infrastructure it may decrease the hungry people rise down.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You address both questions by identifying misuse of donated funds as a reason people remain hungry and proposing government checks on charities. The personal example of working for a foundation gives the response some relevant support. However, the explanation is narrow: it focuses almost entirely on charity fraud and does not explore other likely causes, such as conflict, poverty, unequal food distribution, or limited access to markets. The proposed solution is also only partly developed; explain how financial audits or penalties would ensure that food reaches people in need. Your position becomes clearer in the conclusion, but the opening is difficult to follow. Broader causes and more fully explained solutions would make the response more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has identifiable paragraphs for a cause, a proposed solution, your opinion, and a conclusion, so the reader can recognise its general structure. You also use signposts such as “On one hand,” “On other hand,” and “In conclusion.” However, progression is not consistently clear: the paragraph beginning “In my opinion” repeats the discussion of donations and fraud rather than extending the solution, and the opening sentence combines several ideas without a clear relationship. Some linking phrases are inaccurate or mechanical, and references such as “they” and “it” do not always make clear which people or organisations are meant. Organise the response around causes followed by solutions, and use clearer links between each claim and its explanation.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “donate,” “foundation,” “government,” “permission,” and “balance sheet.” This gives you a basic means of discussing charity oversight and hunger. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, especially “foundation company,” “scam,” and “donation money.” Some word combinations are unclear or unnatural, such as “infrastructure in the foundation of feed poor people” and “people who are send donation money,” which can make your meaning difficult to follow. Aim for more precise topic vocabulary and natural collocations, for example, “charitable organisations,” “misappropriated donations,” and “food distribution.” Check word forms and spelling as well, including “their” where you mean “there.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional idea about government oversight: “if government make a infrastructure it may decrease…” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence structure and basic grammar sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “many people still go hungry due to lack of infrastructure … which they scam donation money” does not clearly connect its clauses; “their are” should be “there are,” and “people who are send” needs a correct verb form. Subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and punctuation also need attention. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine related ideas with accurate clauses. Proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.
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