Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In today's rapidly changing world poverty has become a matter of considerable debate, because there is advanced technology for development and better farming and every area of agriculture but still much population of the world starve for the food. The easy will examine the main cause of this issue before suggesting some effective solutions.

One of the main reason why many people in the world still do not have food is the unemployment. The unemployment is the main reason of the poverty because of the growing population, Many countries in the world like India and China has over population as result many people in the countries do not have employment and any kind of work that will help them provide at least bread hence they have to starve for the food. For instance, there is many slum areas in the India, the family members in the one family is more the 10 and the earner of the family is only one person that is why they will not get enough money to feed the family.

Therefore, in my opinion population should be in the control, I think government should take the action to control the population through the proper guidance for family planning because advanced technology would not be helpful fof providing the enough food for this growing population.

In conclusion, although agriculture has been using advanced technology but still many people go hungry because of the less resources and more population, hence it will remain the same unless government will not take action and spread the awairnes regarding birth control and family planning according to the financial situation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions by identifying unemployment and population growth as reasons for hunger, then proposing family planning and government action. The example of a large family with one earner helps illustrate how poverty can limit access to food. However, the response only partially explains the problem: it does not clearly connect agricultural advances to hunger or explore other relevant causes, such as food distribution, conflict, or people’s inability to afford available food. The proposed solution is also narrow and is not developed beyond population control. The position is understandable, but the reasoning remains general and some claims about countries and families need clearer support. Develop a fuller explanation of causes and explain how each proposed measure would reduce hunger.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on a cause, a paragraph proposing a solution, and a conclusion. Sequencing is generally clear, and signposts such as “For instance,” “Therefore,” and “In conclusion” help show the relationship between ideas. However, some linking is mechanical, and the conclusion largely repeats the earlier points rather than bringing the argument together. Connections within sentences are sometimes unclear, particularly in the long sentence beginning “Many countries in the world like India and China…”. The reference to “the easy” in the introduction also makes the intended progression difficult to follow. Use clearer topic sentences and divide long chains of ideas into shorter, logically connected sentences; vary linking expressions and make references explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “unemployment,” “poverty,” “agriculture,” “family planning,” and “financial situation,” so the reader can follow the main subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning awkward: “much population … starve for the food,” “provide at least bread,” and “population should be in the control.” There are also spelling errors such as “awairnes” and “fof,” alongside repetition of “food,” “population,” and “government.” Aim for more precise expressions and check word forms and spelling. For example, use “a large proportion of the population goes hungry” and “keep population growth under control” to express your ideas more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including cause-and-effect structures with “because” and “that is why,” and the main argument is usually understandable. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries recur. Examples include “One of the main reason,” “many countries … has,” and “there is many slum areas.” The sentence beginning “Many countries in the world like India and China” runs several ideas together, while capitalisation and comma use are inconsistent. These problems can make the reader work to follow the reasoning. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and separating independent clauses; then check articles and plural forms. A few well-controlled complex sentences would be more effective than long, error-prone ones.

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