Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, there are soo many advancement in the agricutulture due develpment in the scince. From this progress there is a huge amount of benfits to agricuturel gains. And from this develpment the amount of ouput is also increased with the large numbers.

Unfortunalty, this high number is not divide on the every countre, on every singal people. There are lots of reasons for this system, the one major reason is rapidly increasing the population, secondaly the wheel of rich and poor, and the connections of countries.

The major reason for people become hungry is that the gradually increased amount of population. The population increased with time alternativily the amount of food is needed more. So, the agricuturel develpment is also rapdily used in this area.

another reason is trhe wheel of rich and poor. If the wheat is passed to every poor then there business is completely stoped and then there is no avilblity of rich and poor there differeance will be noon. If the growth of wheat is progressed then this year they almost 30% they waste food without any reason.

The thired reason is the export and import that happend between the countries. There are lot of countries where the amount agricutural is at zero. When they buy the food from another country it will cost them very high. Approximatly, the poor xcannot buy it and he will hungry. On the other hand there will be issues between countires that they cannot give the enouph food to its neighbour country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant causes, including population growth, unequal distribution between rich and poor, and difficulties with food imports and exports. The example that some food is wasted also supports the general point that hunger can persist despite increased production. However, the response only partly answers the task: it gives causes but does not explain what should be done, which is a major part of the question. Some explanations are also unclear, particularly the claim that distributing wheat to poor people would stop the business of the rich. To improve, address both questions explicitly and develop each idea with a clear explanation or a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs for an introduction and several causes, and signposts such as “another reason” and “on the other hand” help readers recognise some relationships between ideas. However, the overall progression is limited: the essay moves from causes to further causes without a paragraph proposing solutions, and some links between sentences are difficult to follow. For example, the connection between population growth and agricultural development is not clearly explained. The repeated use of “the major reason,” “another reason,” and “the third reason” also makes the organisation feel mechanical. Group related points more clearly, use pronouns or linking phrases with clear references, and finish with a solutions paragraph and a brief conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “agriculture,” “population,” “export and import,” and “availability,” and you try to express ideas about food production and distribution. However, spelling errors are frequent, as in “agricutulture,” “develpment,” and “Unfortunalty,” and several word choices or combinations make the meaning difficult to understand. Phrases such as “the wheel of rich and poor” and “the amount of agricultural is at zero” are not natural or precise in this context. Build accuracy with common topic collocations before reaching for more complex expressions. For instance, use “the gap between rich and poor” and “agricultural production is very low.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures with connectors such as “if,” “when,” and “on the other hand.” This shows an effort to vary sentence forms, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to follow. For example, “the amount of food is needed more” has an unclear structure, while “If the wheat is passed to every poor then there business is completely stoped” contains problems with clause construction, agreement, and possessives. Sentence boundaries and capitalisation are also inconsistent, as in the lowercase “another reason” after a paragraph break. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences, then combine them using one clear subordinate clause at a time.

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