Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

A generation ago, in agriculture spite of the advances made in it. However, many people around the world are still go hungry. according to the topic this essay looks for the problems of still people go hungry after spite of the advances made in agriculture.

Firstly, the reason for still people go hungry around the world is that the main cause of money problem some people still do not afford to buy agricultural items for thair usage. but according to my opiniun solution for this problem government should ensure reduce the prices of the agricultural items that make it for everyone easier to purchase.

second cause of this problem is about to lower purchasing prices by the goverment given to the formers, when government gives lower costs as much as their expense to former for purchasing their goods they don't want to sell it in the market, and could not be happy from this, to solve this problem government should have to give the costs to former as much as their expenses, so they should be happy to sell in market and by hand person.

At last, the third reason is that market put high prices for selling agricultures to the customers for example : shopkeeper purchase agriculture at the lowest prices and sell it to customer at higher prices as much as they wish so poor persons could not buy it's not affordable for them. To solve this problem government should have to take strict action against shopkeepers and marketers and provide fixed rate sheets for the agricultural costs and this make easier for everyone to purchase agriculture.

To conclude, by following all above action, no one in the world should be go hungry after the spite of the advances made in agriculture.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions by giving three possible causes—limited ability to afford food, low payments to farmers, and high retail prices—and suggesting government action for each. This gives the response a relevant, consistent focus. However, the explanations are not always clear or fully developed. For example, the link between low prices paid to farmers and hunger is asserted, but the effects on food production or availability are not explained. The proposed measures also concentrate on prices and shopkeepers, without considering other causes such as conflict, food distribution, or crop loss. Develop each cause with a clear explanation and a specific example, and show how the proposed action would reduce hunger.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, three body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly follow a cause-and-solution pattern. Sequencing phrases such as “Firstly,” “second cause,” and “To conclude” help readers identify the stages of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, and linking is repetitive or awkward. The second paragraph, for instance, moves from farmers receiving low prices to their reluctance to sell, but the relationship between these points is not expressed clearly. The introduction also repeats the task rather than setting out a clear plan. Use topic sentences that state one main idea, then connect its explanation and solution with precise references and less mechanical transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “agriculture,” “purchase,” “prices,” and “government,” so the general subject is identifiable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “agricultural items,” “purchasing prices,” and “sell in market and by hand person” are not natural or precise in this context. There are also spelling errors, including “thair,” “opiniun,” and “formers.” Build a more accurate set of expressions for food access and supply, such as “afford nutritious food,” “prices paid to farmers,” and “food retailers,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “when” and “so,” but control is limited and errors occur frequently. These sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to understand. For example, “many people around the world are still go hungry” has an incorrect verb form, while “government should have to give the costs to former as much as their expenses” has problems with articles, verb patterns and sentence construction. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in the lowercase “according” after a full stop and the run-on structure in the second body paragraph. Practise accurate subject–verb patterns and build longer sentences from clear, correctly punctuated clauses before adding complexity.

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