Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The changes or advaces made in agriculture world requires more money. That is one of the particular reason that many people still stay hungry.

As we live in capitalist world the inflation spikes everyday even though advances are made in agriculture but those advances are not made free of cost. They do require more money and that leads to a spike in rates of food. The people that already live from hand to mouth cannot afford the advancements and expensive food. That's why many of them still are hungry because the rate of food kept increasing all these years due to inflation and advancements used in agriculture that also adds more cost to food.

Infact the poverty line has raised from the previous years, that people which can afford food before now cannot. So the advancement being made are not helpful for people that already live in poverty.

The techniques used in past were simple and not costly so farmers didn't added much cost for their profit because simple techniques do not need as much money as the modern world advancement do. More the advancements, like using artificial intelligence to detect the pests in fields is more expensive than using simple hand picking method to remove the pests.

To conclude, the advancements are costly and expensive and as the inflation rates increases and the income of people are not enough to afford daily necessities these advancement do nothing to benefit them but they do make it hard for them to buy food so the least they can do is stay hungry as they can't do anything else.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify a possible reason for hunger—higher costs associated with modern farming and food—and explain how this may affect people living in poverty. The example contrasting AI pest detection with hand-picking also makes the discussion more specific. However, the task asks both why hunger persists and what can be done, and the response develops only the causes. The conclusion repeats that people cannot afford food but offers no measures, such as targeted food assistance, investment in affordable farming methods, or better distribution. Some claims, including that agricultural advances directly raise food prices and that the poverty line has risen, are asserted without explanation or support. Address both questions explicitly and develop each main idea with a clear explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an opening statement, paragraphs explaining costs and poverty, and a concluding paragraph. The ideas are generally related to the topic, and links such as “That’s why” and “To conclude” help signal relationships. However, progression is limited because the paragraphs largely repeat the same point about expensive advances and unaffordable food. The final paragraph summarises the cause rather than moving to the task’s unanswered question about solutions. Some connections are also unclear, as in “Infact the poverty line has raised from the previous years, that people which can afford food before now cannot.” Organise the body around distinct causes and solutions, and use clearer referencing and transitions to show how each point develops.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “inflation,” “poverty line,” “daily necessities,” and “artificial intelligence,” and phrases such as “live from hand to mouth” show an attempt to use idiomatic language. However, the range is limited by repeated use of “advancements,” “food,” “costly,” and “expensive,” and several choices or forms are inaccurate: “the rate of food” is unclear, while “advaces” and “Infact” are misspelled. Some phrasing is also awkward, such as “the changes or advances made in agriculture world.” Aim for more precise terms, for example “food prices,” “agricultural innovations,” and “production costs,” and check spelling and collocations. This would make the argument clearer and less repetitive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a cause-and-effect structure in “They do require more money and that leads to a spike in rates of food.” However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and errors recur in agreement, articles, and clause construction. For example, “one of the particular reason” needs a plural noun, while “the advancement being made are not helpful” has a mismatch between subject and verb. The sentence beginning “Infact the poverty line has raised…” joins clauses in an unclear way, and “as the inflation rates increases” also has an agreement error. These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to follow. Practise accurate sentence patterns and proofread for singular/plural agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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