Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In spite of technology advances made in agriculture to improve more food production, some people around the world still go hungry. This is because farmers especially the local farmers do not have access to government funds and most farmers do not have the expected climate reports for the year before planting.

One of the reason why many people still go hungry worldwide despite advances made in agriculture is because local farmers do not have access to government funds. These funds would enable them to acquire machines and improved seeds which will reduce their stress and increase yields respectively. For instance, there are some areas located in each state of a country that can be used for farming, but unavailable funds would hinder the farmers to make use of extensive parts of the land. Furthermore, if the farmers are to use a large portion of the need, they will need machineries to plough, plants and also harvest their produces. Therefore, if farmers have access to government helps in machine and monetary form, cultivation would be practiced in large quantity and yield will be much, this will increase availability of food worldwide.

Another reason why world go hungry in spite of the advances made in agriculture is that many farmers are not aware, informed or properly informed about expected climate reports for the year before planting. Weather and climate forecast is one major essentials needed for planting. Every year, agricultural meteorologists produce report before planting season but many local farmers don't get the reports due to their location and ignorance, For example, in the year 2024, the Nigeria n Meteorological Agency released a forecast but many farmers were not informed because it was not conveyed to the local farmers. there was famine that year because many farmers practised their earlier knowledge not knowing there has been a change. This therefore resulted in famine because those that were lucky or informed couldn't produce enough for the nation.

In conclusion, I would suggest that the government should make funds available fot the farmers and also introduce grassroot lectures on weather and climate forecast for the local farmers

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions by identifying two causes—limited support for local farmers and poor access to climate forecasts—and proposing government funding and grassroots education. The examples about machinery, seeds, and Nigeria’s meteorological agency make the response relevant. However, the two causes are not developed equally: the funding point explains how support could increase production, while the forecast discussion makes a broad claim about famine in 2024 without showing clearly how the forecast affected harvests or hunger. The conclusion gives practical measures but does not explain how they would be implemented or connect them explicitly to reducing hunger. Develop the evidence and causal links more carefully, and make the proposed solutions more specific.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two causes, and a concluding recommendation. The progression from causes to solutions is easy to follow, and signposts such as “Furthermore,” “For instance,” and “In conclusion” help guide the reader. This meets the lower-band expectations securely and shows some features of stronger organisation. However, transitions can feel mechanical because both body paragraphs begin with similar “One reason/Another reason” phrasing, and “Therefore” and “This therefore” repeat the same relationship. Some links between claims are also unclear, particularly the move from the 2024 forecast to famine. Use more varied, precise transitions and make each example’s connection to its main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “improved seeds,” “yields,” “climate forecast,” and “agricultural meteorologists,” which helps communicate the subject. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “cultivation” and “availability of food.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive: “technology advances,” “government helps,” “expected climate reports,” and “produce their produces” do not sound natural in context. Spelling and word-form slips, including “fot” and “Nigeria n,” also reduce control. The meaning is generally recoverable, but a more reliable range of natural collocations would improve precision. Learn phrases such as “agricultural technology,” “government assistance,” and “weather forecasts” as complete units.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “if farmers have access…” and clauses beginning “because” and “which.” This gives the response some variety, and the main ideas are usually understandable. However, some errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries remain. Examples include “One of the reason,” “Another reason why world go hungry,” and “machineries to plough, plants and also harvest.” The long sentence beginning “For example, in the year 2024” also contains a comma splice and an incorrectly capitalised sentence after “local farmers.” Review subject–verb agreement, singular and plural forms, and punctuation between independent clauses. Shorter, carefully checked sentences would help you retain complexity while improving accuracy.

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