Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There has been a growing concern about the increasing starvation for many people in the world, despite the improvements that has been made on the farming field.

To begin with, there is no denying the fact that agriculture field has positively developed in recent years, however, seeing people still hungry is an interesting point, this mainly because majority of the products are being shipped to a developped countries leaving the poor ones in starvation. Moreover, poverty has played an essential role in this situation because lack of money and equipement that can poor people can not afford and we find others take advantage and exploit these weaknesses.For example, India is very agricultural country, however lots of people suffer from hungriness due to lack of financial support .

However, a lot of actions can be made to solve this problem, giving the priority to home countries to benefit from what agriculture provide rather than shipping it abroad, a good solution can be done to reduce the hungriness and lessen the misuse of agriculture, consequently, a remarkabe decrease in starvation's proportion and huge decline in poverty with increasing in number of farmers. For example, lately South african goverment has supported its local farmers and non farmers financially in addition to support the local fariming and agriculture and also provided a pourcentage to benefit from their land products, and this decision has been so beneficial and significant to a lot of people to fill their stomachs and provide for their families.

In conclusion, recently the amount of hungry people has increased immensely, but its never too late and a lot of changes can be made to avoid this situation and well benifit from agriculture's pruduction.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions: you identify poverty, unequal distribution of agricultural products, and limited access to money and equipment as causes, then propose prioritising domestic supply and supporting farmers financially. The India and South Africa examples help make the discussion relevant. This fits the task because the main ideas are clear, but some are less fully explained than others. For instance, the claim that products are shipped to developed countries is presented without explaining why this happens or how it contributes to hunger; the proposed domestic-priority policy also needs more detail about how it would reach people in need. Develop each cause-and-solution link with a brief explanation or specific supporting detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on solutions, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “To begin with,” “Moreover,” “However,” and “In conclusion” helps readers follow the broad progression. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, and several long sentences combine multiple points without clear boundaries. The sentence beginning “To begin with” moves from agricultural progress to exports, poverty, equipment, and exploitation, making the relationships difficult to track. References such as “this situation” and “this decision” are understandable but could be more precise. Use shorter sentences to separate cause, explanation, and example, and connect ideas through clearer logical links rather than relying mainly on transition phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “agriculture,” “financial support,” “local farmers,” “poverty,” and “starvation,” and you attempt more formal expressions such as “played an essential role” and “benefit from.” However, inaccurate word choice, collocation, and spelling are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning less natural. Examples include “increasing starvation,” “hungriness,” “remarkabe decrease,” and “a pourcentage.” Some phrases, such as “misuse of agriculture,” do not clearly express the intended idea. Aim for precise, conventional combinations and check spelling carefully. Replacing repeated or awkward expressions with terms such as “food insecurity,” “food distribution,” and “agricultural production” would make the discussion clearer and more appropriate to the topic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “despite,” “because,” and “however,” and the overall meaning can generally be followed. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in agreement, articles, sentence boundaries, and clause construction. For example, “the improvements that has been made” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “majority of the products” needs an article. The sentence beginning “a good solution can be done” is also awkwardly constructed, and several ideas are joined with commas where full stops or clearer conjunctions are needed. Practise building complex sentences around one main clause, then check agreement and articles during revision. More accurate punctuation would also help prevent run-on sentences.

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