Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In a world of growing agriculture pupil still donot have enough to eat.There are several reasons that would be covered in this essay.

Government generate hefty revenue in agriculture each year by export to differentt couuntries. In order to increase the GDP of the country to invest in major sectors so they try to sell more agriculture products worldwide without realizing that majority of population cant afford to eat and as a result such people remain unseen.Examples are the elites of the country who eat well while the people who are below them are ignored as if they have no role in society.Solution to this should be the action plan of government to make all necessary food items available free of cost for the people who cant afford from the profit they generate each year and elites should run charity programs to colaborate with government.

Curruption and dishonesty is one of the leading cause of famine.Government look for their benefit while farmers who cultivate and harvest think of their profit and sell the products at a higher cost to state which inturn is sold at double prices by the state to the shops and thus people with low or no income suffer. It can be tackled by keeping lower prices by the state and a proper strict inspection so the shopkeepers donot sell at higher rates.

Some countries has a package for people that cover food,medical and offers some cash.This is a good initiative because a country is built and gain prosperity by its people this method should be adapted all around world to fulfil all needs of it people.

Government should introduce budget friendly policies.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions by identifying possible causes—export-focused government policy and corruption or high prices—and proposing responses such as food support, charity, price controls, inspections, and social packages. These ideas are relevant, but they are often asserted rather than explained. For example, the claim that governments export food to increase GDP needs clearer explanation of how this leads to hunger, and the proposed free provision of food is not discussed in terms of how it could be organised or funded. The final recommendation to introduce “budget friendly policies” is also too general. Develop fewer points with a specific explanation or example, and make your overall position clearer from the introduction through to the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, paragraphs presenting causes and solutions, and a final recommendation. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “as a result” and “It can be tackled” signal relationships between ideas. However, the progression is not consistently clear. The first body paragraph combines exports, inequality, an example about elites, and two solutions, making its central point difficult to follow. The next paragraph shifts to corruption and pricing, while the final paragraph introduces social packages without linking them clearly to the earlier proposals. Use one main focus per paragraph, connect each cause directly to a corresponding solution, and add a conclusion that summarises the response.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “agriculture,” “GDP,” “famine,” “cultivate,” “harvest,” and “inspection,” which helps communicate the subject. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “leading cause” and “prosperity.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, including “agriculture pupil,” “hefty revenue in agriculture,” and “sell at higher rates.” Spelling errors such as “Curruption,” “colaborate,” and “differentt” are noticeable and can distract the reader. Build a more precise set of expressions for food insecurity, distribution, affordability, and public assistance, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a cause-and-effect sentence beginning “Government look for their benefit while farmers…” and a conditional-style proposal about food provision. However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and frequent errors affect clarity. Examples include “Government generate” and “Government look,” where subject–verb agreement is incorrect, and “Some countries has,” which also has an agreement error. Articles and sentence boundaries are often missing, as in “In a world of growing agriculture pupil still donot have enough to eat.” Several long sentences need clearer punctuation or restructuring. Practise accurate agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, then build longer sentences from shorter, correct clauses.

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