Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

By the advances made in culture farmers have some better experience for all the crops fertilization having a simple more easier paths of farming.As well as on the other hand much civilians are still fighting for hunger. governement do not making the farmers happy by not providing there good priceses of corps in markit so they stock all the crops insteadof selling them in lower prces they wait for the rising of prizes on there peak so they have good profit.So the government should increase the prizes for avalibility of the flour also other crops.Government have to genrate better opurtunities moreover all the prizes and having strickt rules to prevent by this kind of problems by having all the records then ceate a team to get all the information about the agriculture. There are some importent reasons for the hungerness of many civilians only government illegebility is not only the cause of the hungerness of the people in the world different countries are preventing from those kind of issues so their own avalebility for the crops in agriculture and providing some more extra benefits for the farmers to maintaine the budget to lower the priceses for their civilians need to help them to have some excellent food to eat plus have some better lifes.Moreover in my mind we need to increase all the fertile lands by not making residential ares on the fertile lands to prevent all these issues then we have to decrease all the expencies those are really impotent in farming to lower the prices to make the crops in range of lower middle class to have atleast 3 times a food in their daily life.In the end ia want tos say that we need more aaccuracy to fullfill the needs pof power people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions by suggesting that farmers withhold crops when prices are low and by proposing government support, stricter monitoring, protection of fertile land, and lower farming costs. These are relevant starting points, and your final focus on making food affordable shows an attempt to answer the solutions part. However, the causes are not clearly distinguished or explained, and several claims remain difficult to follow—for example, “government illegibility” is named without explaining what it means. The proposed measures also need clearer links to hunger: explain how fair prices or monitoring would increase food availability and access. A more explicit position and one developed example would make the response more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a broad movement from possible causes to possible solutions, and linking expressions such as “on the other hand,” “moreover,” and “in the end” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the response is presented as one long block, so the reader cannot easily distinguish the explanation of causes from the proposed actions. Several ideas are joined together without clear relationships, and transitions sometimes do not match the meaning—for instance, “on the other hand” does not establish a clear contrast. References such as “these issues” are also vague. Use separate paragraphs for causes and solutions, then organise each around one main point with a clear explanation and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to agriculture and food access, including “fertile lands,” “crops,” “farmers,” and “prices,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make meaning difficult to recover, such as “hungerness,” “avalibility,” “prizes,” and “power people.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “farmers happy” and “excellent food to eat.” These problems sometimes strain the reader’s understanding, particularly when several occur in the same sentence. Build a reliable set of topic phrases and check spelling and collocations; for example, use “food insecurity,” “affordable food,” and “support farmers’ incomes” accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to express connected and complex ideas, including cause-and-effect relationships, but control of sentence structure is inconsistent. Many sentences run together without full stops, and clauses are often joined in ways that obscure their relationships. Verb forms and agreement are also frequently inaccurate, as in “government do not making” and “Government have to genrate.” Articles and plural forms are sometimes missing or incorrect, and punctuation does not reliably mark sentence boundaries. These errors can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them with accurate connectors and check subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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