Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Despite significant improvements in agriculture, millions of people still suffer from hunger worldwide. This essay will disuss the main reasons behind this problem and suggest some possible solutions.

Firstly, the main reason of this situation is poverty. Although, the world developed a lot, million of people have limited income. Also, the rate of unemployment increased day by day. Thus, they do not have enough money to buying food. Another reason is increasing price of daily usable things. If the price of these things could be ressonable, citizen of all occupasion would be able to buy their daily needs. In addition, if government can rises their sallery or able to provide job opportunities for all,they might lead a wealthy life. For example, A begger who do not has enough money to buy food,even if he can get a little job may survive easily.

Secondly, to deal with this issues government should reduce taxes, so that people who are broked they can buy food and their daily needs to live their life. Also government should ensure education for everyone thus they can be employed and get a stable financial ability. Furthermore, society should help poor people to be stable. For example, they can organise campaign to encourage people for hard work. They can also help them to be educated .

In conclusion, nowadays in modern society a lot of people suffer from hunger, there is a lot of modern improvement made in agriculture though. However, from my point of view it can be solve with the combined awareness of government and society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: poverty, unemployment and rising prices are offered as causes, while tax reductions, education, job provision and community support are proposed as responses. The opening also makes the essay’s purpose clear. However, the ideas are only partly developed, which limits the response: for instance, the link between agricultural advances and hunger is not explained, and the example of a beggar getting “a little job” does not show how broader food insecurity could be reduced. Some solutions are also vague, such as asking society to encourage “hard work,” without explaining how this would improve access to food. Develop fewer points with clearer cause-and-effect reasoning and more relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, one on solutions, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the main stages. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, and links between ideas are not always clear. The first body paragraph moves from poverty to prices and then to wages and a beggar example without consistently showing how each point connects to hunger. Phrases such as “Also” and “Thus” are repeated as simple links rather than showing more precise relationships. Improve progression by grouping related points and using clear references—for example, explain how unemployment and low income together restrict food access before introducing a relevant example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “agriculture,” “unemployment,” “taxes,” “job opportunities” and “stable financial ability,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices, collocations and spellings are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “daily usable things,” “citizen of all occupasion,” “broked” and “sallery.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning less clear and keep the vocabulary from being precise. Aim to use common, accurate expressions for this topic, such as “essential goods,” “people in all occupations,” “low-income households” and “food affordability.” Check spelling and word forms carefully, and avoid repeating broad terms such as “things” when a specific noun is available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “If the price of these things could be…” and a clause beginning “Although…”. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction occur frequently. Examples include “people who are broked they can buy,” “government should reduce taxes,” and “it can be solve.” The opening “Although, the world developed a lot” is also not correctly integrated with the following idea. These problems can make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise building accurate sentences around one main clause, then add a subordinate clause; check subject–verb agreement and use the correct verb form after modal verbs and passive constructions.

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