Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays farming has become easier due to the developements in agriculture. However, there are many people still fighting with hunger. This is a majour issue of the current time. Also very important to be solve to save innocent lives.

On the one hand, Although there are many new advancements in agriculture: hybride seeds- grows faster and in large quantity compared to tradditional seeds; instruments such as Tractor and threcer- helps to prepare land easily and reap effortlessly and water well facility too. But these are the things not all farmers can afford. In addition, the machineries needs fuel and maintenance too, that needs a lot of finances which might be a burden for farmers below the middle class. Also, on account of industrialization large fields of farming lands are converting into the factories or storage cottages, that leeds to less farming and less production of food compared to the demand of increasing population.

There are some solutions for these problems which includes the government and policies for land acquisition. The government should provide subsidies on seeds and instruments which are necessary for farming. Also, water supply for farming is very important so the electricity for that should be afordable for them too. In addition, government should make strict policies and rules for land acquiring and industrialization so that farming lands are remain intact. The government involvement and restrictions on factories also the financial assistance is crucial for farming.

In my opinion, if we solve these problems our farmers may increase the farming; food and grain production. That will eventually leads to satisfy the hunger.

To conclude, There are problems related to lands; instruments and finances but with government support and strict policies we can solve the problems and produce food for more people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses both questions: it explains that modern equipment and inputs are unaffordable for some farmers, and that farmland is being converted for industrial use; it then proposes subsidies, affordable electricity, and stricter land-use policies. These are relevant causes and solutions, and the conclusion restates the central argument. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained. For example, the link between industrialisation, reduced food production, and hunger could be made more explicit, and the proposed subsidies are not connected to how they would improve access to food for hungry people. Develop each main point with a clear explanation or a specific example, and distinguish more clearly between causes of low production and causes of unequal food access.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay has a clear overall structure, moving from an introduction to causes, solutions, an opinion, and a conclusion. Paragraphing helps the reader follow this progression, and linking expressions such as “In addition” and “To conclude” make relationships between points visible. This already provides a coherent arrangement. To make the flow more flexible and precise, avoid relying on repeated additive transitions and ensure each paragraph has a clear internal sequence. The opening “On the one hand” suggests a contrast or a second side, but the paragraph mainly lists causes; a more direct topic sentence would better signal its purpose. Also clarify references such as “these problems” by naming the specific issue when moving from causes to solutions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses relevant topic vocabulary, including “hybrid seeds,” “subsidies,” “land acquisition,” “industrialization,” and “financial assistance.” This gives the discussion an appropriate subject focus, and the meaning is generally understandable. However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural combinations are noticeable, including “developements,” “majour,” “tradditional,” “water well facility,” and “satisfy the hunger.” Some terms are also used vaguely: “storage cottages” does not clearly describe the type of development intended. Aim for accurate spelling and more natural collocations, such as “irrigation systems,” “agricultural land,” and “alleviate hunger.” Proofreading and checking unfamiliar phrases in context would make the vocabulary more reliable and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There is an attempt to use both simple and more complex structures, including a relative clause in “which might be a burden for farmers” and a conditional sentence beginning “if we solve these problems.” The main ideas can usually be understood, but errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction recur. For example, “the machineries needs” has a subject–verb and countability problem, while “which includes the government” does not agree with the plural “solutions.” The fragment “Also very important to be solve” lacks a clear subject and has an incorrect verb form. Some long sentences, particularly the list of agricultural advances, are difficult to control. Practise building complete sentences and checking subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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