Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

As food is the main source of human survival and because of the latest innovation done by science and technology in many sector including agriculture by changing traditional method to modern method. As still because of exploitation of farmer by middle men and also because of uncertainty in climate change leads to destruction of vegetation.

There was always be a news of people are die because of starvation hunger ,as not getting the food ,also because of high price charge by vendor or making a false scarcity. As increase in innovation agriculture like making green house and high quality pesticides which did not affect the human health and help to protect from fungs and bacteria. But even though not getting satisfactory reward people are discontinue the farming as they are being exploit by middle men.

To avoid , there has to be a proper policy made by goverment of protecting the rights of the farmer. Instead of middle men the farmer had an access to directly vendor or customer to quote the price. Also a big penaltiy for the exploitator and spreading the false scarcity. Even like kisan credit card by giving loan to farmer for agriculture purpose and also proper transportation to provide goods to every part of country. For below poverty line people there has be special card form which at the least price they can buy and satisfy the basic needs.

so by supporting this it would benefical farmer and local people

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying causes (exploitation, climate change, market manipulation) and solutions (government policy, direct market access, subsidies). However, the development is limited by the word count, which falls just short of the 250-word requirement. The ideas are presented in a somewhat fragmented manner, and the lack of a clear introduction and conclusion hinders the overall task response. To improve, you should expand on your points with more specific examples and ensure the essay structure is more robust to fully explore the complexities of global hunger.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by sentence fragments and awkward transitions. For example, the first paragraph is a series of dependent clauses rather than complete sentences. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often applied incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'As' to start sentences. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the relationships between the causes and the proposed solutions are not clearly linked. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence is complete would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'false scarcity' and 'exploitator'. Some terms are used incorrectly, such as 'discontinue the farming' instead of 'abandon farming' or 'cease agricultural activities'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range is limited, and the errors in collocation and word formation occasionally distract the reader. Focusing on learning word families and common collocations in the context of agriculture and economics would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that impede readability. Many sentences are incomplete or lack a main verb, such as the opening paragraph. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage (e.g., 'by goverment of protecting', 'the farmer had an access'). While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are often faulty, leading to confusion. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and a finite verb—before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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