Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.
Why is this the case?
What can be done about this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is argued that the advances in agriculture provide sustainable way of harvesting and croping and many people around the world go hunger. I completely agree that the proper severage systems and advanced machinery help to grow plants properly. This essay will discuss the main reasons before presenting my opinion.
On the one hand, there are several advantages of technology in agriculture. The primary reason is that the digital advantages of agriculture allow farmers to use advanced techniques for harvesting and croping. Similarly, the drainage system encourages farmer to improve the quality of agricultural practices and soil quality. Another contributing factor is that using high quality significantly enhance crop yields and improve resistance to diseases and ensure better quality agricultural produce.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement, which severely limits the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address the prompt, it fails to provide a comprehensive answer to the two-part question. The content focuses on the benefits of agricultural technology rather than explaining why hunger persists or proposing solutions. The position is unclear, and the argument is underdeveloped. Because the response is less than half the required length, it cannot be considered a full attempt at the task, resulting in a low score for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into an introduction and one body paragraph. However, the progression of ideas is weak due to the lack of sufficient content. Cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand' and 'Another contributing factor' are used, but they feel mechanical because the subsequent arguments are not fully developed or logically linked to the prompt's core questions. Paragraphing is present, but the overall structure is incomplete, as the essay ends abruptly without a conclusion or a balanced discussion of the two parts of the task.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are noticeable errors in word choice and word formation, such as 'croping' (cropping) and 'severage' (likely meant 'sewage' or 'irrigation'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss the topic with any degree of precision or sophistication. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of variety and the presence of errors in basic terminology prevent the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, you should focus on using more precise academic collocations related to global issues and agriculture.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay uses a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'provide sustainable way' (missing article), 'go hunger' (should be 'go hungry'), and 'using high quality significantly enhance' (subject-verb agreement error). These errors occur throughout the text. While the sentences are generally simple enough to be understood, the lack of control over basic grammar and the limited range of complex structures restrict the score. More attention to sentence construction and proofreading for basic errors is required.
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