Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Today there are a lot of advances made in agriculture and along with this development many people around the world still go hungry. After the advances people still hungry because the government did not provide a well known price of the crops of the farmer and this reason made a farmer hungry.

Firstly, in our country a lot of individuals belong to a farming and after a many advances in agriculture field a lot of people around the world still go hungry because the producer buy a new tools for farming and the farmer bought a tractor for using this tools and when the started to growing their crops the spend a lot of money on the tools and the crops and when the crop of the farmer was fully grown and then the government did not give a good price on his crops and this is the reason the people still go hungry and the farmer did not get a relief on their tools in now a days the price of the tools those use in the farming is very expensive the farmer did not afford this prices.

Secondly, the of government could solve the problem of the farmers by give a good relief in tools and tractors and decrease the amount of the medicine those use to get a good crop from the field and mostly the government reduce the prices of the fuel because the most of the farmers use fuel to rise their crops. The other thing is the government give a good price of the crops of the farmer if the government done this things the people around the world did not hungry.

To sum up, the farmers enjoy a good life if the government help the farmers to buy a new tools for the farming and give a loan without the markup.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the task by discussing the reasons for hunger despite advancements in agriculture and potential solutions. However, the reasoning is somewhat unclear and lacks a structured argumentation. For instance, the phrase "the government did not provide a well known price of the crops of the farmer" is vague. Additionally, while it explores solutions, the focus is primarily on government intervention, limiting the scope. This could be improved by incorporating a wider range of factors contributing to hunger and more solutions. Overall, the task achievement could be rated lower due to unclear arguments and a lack of detailed examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

Coherence and cohesion in the response are lacking, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's ideas clearly. The transitions between sentences and paragraphs are weak, as seen in phrases like "this is the reason the people still go hungry" which does not connect smoothly to previous points. The organization of ideas is not logical, with ideas being presented in a disorganized manner. The conclusion attempts to sum up the discussion but does not effectively link back to the arguments made earlier. Overall, there's a need for clearer logical flow and better use of cohesive devices.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The lexical resource displays a basic vocabulary range but lacks precision and variety. Words like "advances," "give a good price," and "farmer did not afford" are repeated or vague, demonstrating limited lexical sophistication. For example, using "financial assistance" instead of "good relief" could be more effective. While some terms are appropriate, like "tractor," overall, there is insufficient use of higher-level vocabulary that could convey ideas more effectively. Improving vocabulary variety and accuracy would enhance the overall impact of the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range and accuracy show numerous issues, with many sentences suffering from poor structure, lack of punctuation, and occasional grammatical errors. For instance, the sentence "the producer buy a new tools for farming" contains a subject-verb agreement error. Additionally, many sentences are overly lengthy and convoluted, leading to confusion. Some phrases are awkwardly constructed, such as "the farmer did not get a relief on their tools." While the writer demonstrates some ability to use complex sentences, grammatical inaccuracies hinder fluency and clarity.

Overall feedback

The response shows a good attempt to tackle the topic but suffers from a lack of clarity and coherence. To improve, focus on clear structuring of ideas, ensuring each paragraph has a defined main point. Use examples to support your arguments, as this will enhance your task achievement score. Expanding your vocabulary will also aid in expressing ideas more effectively. Consider practicing linking sentences and paragraphs with cohesive devices to improve overall flow. Additionally, pay attention to sentence construction to avoid grammatical errors that hinder communication.

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