Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many advances are made to upgrade the agriculture modes. However, still due to some reasons people around the world has to face starvation.

Overall it is a government problem which should instantly taken in notice by the selected persons in power.

The reason behind this thing is lack of knowledge and lack of power. Farmers sells the product for higher rate to the person of his own known rather than selling it to the government. Moreover, government supports the the people cutting trees and farms for their multi stored project which destroys the agriculture. In addition to that, some countries around the world has low employment rate due to which people face financial struggle and some people starve because of that. Government to should take the accountability about this agriculture disaster in some countries.

The authorities should check the agriculture rates and qualities every time. Moreover the farmers should get the equipment and all kinds important things from which they can cultivate efficiently. Government should check the rates of agriculture imports and shipments. In addition to that government can run schemes to protect the agriculture which is wasted all around the world and to use it for the benefit of the country and people.

The measures should be strictly taken for agriculture, Higher Authorities should give free food kits to the people who is affected with this imbalanced chain. For example; If government starts loosening the taxes which are contained on food then many people around the world can have a meal for one time because there will be no taxes to so they can get food on cheaper rate

It concludes that these reasons should be taken under consideration by higher authorities and effective steps should be take to protect people from starvation

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: reasons for hunger and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is limited. For instance, the explanation regarding farmers selling products to 'known' persons is vague and lacks a clear logical link to global hunger. Similarly, the suggestion to 'loosen taxes' is mentioned but not fully explained in terms of how it would practically impact food security. The position is generally clear, but the arguments remain somewhat superficial and lack the depth required for a higher band score. To improve, you should provide more concrete examples and explain the causal links between your points more thoroughly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'In addition to that', they are used somewhat mechanically. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'The reason behind this thing', where the antecedent is ambiguous. Furthermore, the concluding paragraph is very brief and does not effectively synthesise the main points of the essay. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would enhance the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'agriculture modes' and 'important things', which are not idiomatic in this context. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'agriculture disaster' and 'multi stored project'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more academic and topic-specific vocabulary (e.g., 'food insecurity', 'supply chain', 'subsidies'). While the meaning is generally clear, the limited range of vocabulary restricts the sophistication of your arguments.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('people... has to face', 'farmers sells', 'some countries... has'), article misuse ('the the people'), and awkward phrasing ('which is wasted all around the world'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of semicolons and commas. While the errors do not completely prevent understanding, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and proofreading for article usage would significantly improve your accuracy.

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