Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is argued that, Although there have been various advancement made in agriculture, many people all around the globe still go hungry. this essay will examine how 'lack of education on usage of modern agricultural tools' and 'lack of financial support' drives this issue, as well as argued that 'easy loan provided by the government' and 'providing education regarding the usage of agricultural tools' are the most effective remedies.

The leading cause of this issue is the lack of education regarding the usage of modern agricultural tools. Since most of the agricultural work is done by the elderly people, they lack the knowledge in terms of modern farming equipment. Due to this, they still stick to their traditional methods of farming which can be slow and inefficient. Another reason is the lack of financial support provided to the farmer. As we all know that there are various risk involving agriculture, namely weather condition, pests as well as animals. So there is way too much risk but very less profit for the farmers as the government does not provide a suitable loan taking system as well as an insurance policy for them to decrease the possible danger involving their livelihood.

There are various steps that can be taken to solve this problem. Firstly, the people show be provided with proper knowledge about the functioning of the modern agricultural tools so that they can learn to use those farming equipment to their benefits and increase the efficiency of agriculture. Furthermore, the government should provide the farmers with financial support. As most of the farmers come from middle-class families and are doing agriculture as their means for earning, they do not have much financial saved up such that they can take a huge loss. Due to this, most of the farmers hesitate before starting agriculture. If government could provide a suitable loan scheme for the farmers as well as an information policy regarding the crop production for the farmers, most of the problems can be solved.

In conclusion, while 'lack of knowledge regarding farming equipment' and 'lack of financial support' are the primary causes of this issue which can be effeciently resolved by proper education regarding the usage of agricultural tools and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The essay addresses both parts of the prompt: causes and solutions. However, the response is incomplete, as it cuts off mid-sentence in the conclusion. While the ideas regarding education and financial support are relevant and logically developed, the abrupt ending prevents a full summary of the position. The introduction clearly outlines the essay's scope, but the lack of a finished conclusion impacts the overall task completion. To improve, ensure that all sections are fully drafted and that the conclusion synthesizes the main points effectively rather than trailing off.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a (partial) conclusion. Cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', and 'Due to this' are used to link ideas. However, the progression is interrupted by the incomplete final sentence, which negatively affects the overall flow. Referencing is generally clear, though some phrasing is slightly repetitive. To reach a higher band, ensure that transitions between paragraphs are more sophisticated and that the essay structure is fully realized to maintain a consistent logical flow from start to finish.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the student to express ideas about agriculture and economics clearly. There are some attempts at less common collocations, such as 'modern agricultural tools' and 'financial support'. However, there are minor inaccuracies, such as 'information policy' (likely meaning 'insurance policy') and 'financial saved up'. The range is sufficient to communicate the message, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. Expanding the range of synonyms and ensuring precise word choice would enhance the quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'various advancement made' (should be 'advancements'), 'elderly people' (should be 'elderly farmers'), and 'people show be provided' (should be 'should'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are inconsistent capitalizations, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters like 'this essay'. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and proofreading for basic mechanical errors would be beneficial.

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