Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.
Why is this the case?
What can be done about this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowdays, most of the people face numerous issue in their life and the one main problem is hunger. In today's world society make many technology related to agriculture field. In the upcoming paragraph, I will discuss my point of view on it.
To begin with, nowdays their is alot of advance treatments that are done in agriculture. Farmers grow disease resistance plants to increase their yeild production and also they use organic material on crops. The main reason behind hunger is unemployment because of advance technology there is very low places are avaiable for human to work. Moreover, due to unemployment the poverty rate of a country also increase and it has negative impact on our economy. Sometime if jobs are avaiable companies don't provide much salary to employes. Secondly, low littracy rate is also has big impact on creating this problem. Due to poor family background puplis are not able to complete their acadamic carrer.
To solve these sittuation, our authorities need to implement more strict rules and action towards these problem. Government could provide job as well as educational facilities for those people who are not able to take addmision due to their facinational condition and become unemployed. Furthermore, it is also responsibilty of teachers to take care of their students and focous on their future. Government also needs to introduce some new and extra skills for community.
In conclusion,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying causes (unemployment, low literacy) and solutions (government intervention, education). However, the development is limited and the essay is under the minimum word count, which negatively impacts the depth of the argument. The ideas are relevant but remain somewhat superficial; for instance, the link between agricultural technology and unemployment is asserted but not clearly explained. To improve, you should expand on your points with specific examples or more detailed reasoning to meet the length requirement and provide a more comprehensive analysis.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. There is a basic attempt at using cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion'. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical. The conclusion is incomplete, consisting only of a phrase, which disrupts the overall flow and coherence of the piece. Improving the transition between sentences and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, fully developed concluding thought would enhance the logical flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'Nowdays' (Nowadays), 'yeild' (yield), 'littracy' (literacy), 'puplis' (pupils), and 'acadamic' (academic). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. To achieve a higher score, you should focus on accurate spelling and attempt to use more sophisticated collocations and topic-specific vocabulary related to global hunger and economic policy, rather than relying on basic, repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies primarily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they often contain grammatical errors, such as 'there is very low places are avaiable' and 'low littracy rate is also has big impact'. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent throughout the text. The frequent errors in basic grammar and punctuation occasionally impede the clarity of your message. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like verb tense consistency and pluralisation before attempting more complex structures.
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