Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

There is no denying fact that the phenomena of lack of food in some area across ta world, due to drought and over much cold. Majority of the folks are in the favor of this statement due to it's number of n merits. However, some of the people highlight demerits first. In my further paragraphs, I discuss this view and give my personal reason.

Initiating with the reason of the same, the first and foremost reason is that nowadays grain is producing more and more by advance technology. But some of the area now difficulty to eat food, because of some of the area there are must not enough rain and due to this people cannot grow

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the required 250-word minimum, which severely limits the development of ideas. The essay fails to address the prompt effectively; it misinterprets the task as a discussion of 'merits and demerits' rather than explaining causes and solutions for global hunger. The introduction is largely irrelevant, and the body paragraph is incomplete and fails to provide a clear, logical argument. Because the response is so short and does not engage with the core requirements of the task, it cannot be considered a fully developed essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are fragmented and do not flow logically. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the confusing transition 'Initiating with the reason of the same'. The lack of a clear introduction, body, and conclusion makes the essay difficult to follow. The progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete sentences and the lack of a coherent argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'over much cold' instead of 'extreme cold' and 'grain is producing' instead of 'grain is being produced'. The student struggles to express basic ideas clearly, relying on repetitive and simplistic language. The lack of variety and the persistent errors in word formation and usage significantly impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement ('grain is producing'), article usage ('in some area'), and sentence structure ('because of some of the area there are must not enough rain'). These errors are pervasive and often make the text difficult to comprehend. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the frequent grammatical slips demonstrate a lack of control over basic English syntax.

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