Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

With growing modernisation and advancement of technology, the food industry and agricultural sector is also developing at the rapid pace, however despite various developmental changes, many people die because of hunger.

The development in agricultural sector and food industry is quite benefical to the economy as we are top exporters of various agricultural products, however In many places especially in remote and regional areas there are insufficient sources available due to unequal distrubution of resources. The government doesn't focus on every part of the country which is why there is an increase in income inequality, which ultimatetively results in unemployment and lack of resources to obtain food.

For eg : In India, Punjab is one of the top producers of foodgrains, however there are many remote areas in punjab, where the people cannot afford to buy or purchase foodgrain due to limited resources.

Hence, in order to eradicate the problem of hunger, the root cause needs to be addressed, such as employment, developmental schemes which promote employment can help in generating wealth for families which can be a way to get out of this vicious circle of pverty. Additionally, government should focus on providing subsidies or reduced rate food grains and essentials for the lower income or marginalised families.

For eg : In Maharashtra, there government has launched a food program which provides rice and various pulses & cereals for absolute free of cost. This initiaive has helped several families to save their earned income and use it for education and investments.

Hence, to eradicate hunger problems, goverment should take responsibility in bringing qualitative change rather quantitative change.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by identifying causes of hunger, such as unequal resource distribution and income inequality, and offering solutions like employment generation and food subsidy programs. The position is clear throughout the text, and ideas are extended with specific examples, such as the situation in Punjab and the food program in Maharashtra. However, some of the explanations regarding why people go hungry despite agricultural advances remain slightly under-developed, and the argument could have explored broader global factors beyond regional inequality. The integration of causes and solutions is relevant, but the overall depth places it firmly within the Band 6.5 to 7.0 range, as ideas are presented but not fully fleshed out with exhaustive analysis. Therefore, a band score of 6.0 appropriately reflects the balance of addressing all task parts with some under-developed extension.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The text demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with a clear logical progression from the introduction of the problem to the causes, and finally to the proposed solutions. Paragraphing is utilized, dividing the response into an introduction, cause paragraph, solution paragraphs, and a brief concluding thought. Cohesive devices are employed, such as 'however', 'For eg', and 'Hence', though some transitions are used mechanically or repetitively (e.g., starting multiple sentences or paragraphs with 'Hence'). Referencing is generally clear, but the connection between sentences in the second paragraph feels slightly abrupt due to punctuation and run-on structures. Overall, the organizational structure is easy to follow, supporting a clear progression of thought. These features align well with the Band 6 descriptors, as cohesion is sometimes mechanical and referencing is basic.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'modernisation', 'eradicate', 'marginalised', and 'subsidies'. However, there are notable spelling and word-choice errors that detract from precision, including 'benefical' instead of beneficial, 'distrubution' instead of distribution, 'ultimatetively' instead of ultimately, 'pverty' instead of poverty, and 'goverment' instead of government. Furthermore, phrasing like 'absolute free of cost' is somewhat unnatural. Despite these errors, communication is not impeded, and the student demonstrates a sufficient range of vocabulary to discuss the socio-economic aspects of agricultural distribution and government policy. These characteristics match the Band 6 descriptor, which notes an adequate range with some inaccuracy in word choice and spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response exhibits a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating attempts at subordination with structures like 'In spite of the advances made...' and 'Hence, in order to eradicate...'. However, there are several grammatical errors and punctuation issues throughout the text. For instance, the first sentence is an extremely long run-on structure ('With growing modernisation... hunger.'), and there are agreement issues, such as 'there government has launched' instead of 'the government has launched' or 'their government'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma splices and capitalization errors (e.g., lowercase 'punjab' and 'government' mid-sentence). While these errors do occur frequently, they rarely impede communication, as the intended meaning remains understandable. This performance corresponds directly to the Band 6 descriptor, featuring a mix of structures and non-impeding grammatical errors.

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