Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.
Why is this the case?
What can be done about this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
It has been observed that, despite of huge development in the farming field still the globe is facing starvation. Although the main reasons are overpopulation and inflation, there are ways to curtail this burning issue.
One of the major reasons of this issue is overcrowdedness. This is due to the fact that population is increasing day by day in the world, while the resourses are declining which is leading to poverty and people are fac
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response is severely underdeveloped and incomplete, primarily because it stops abruptly at only 75 words, failing to meet the minimum 250-word requirement. Consequently, it only partially addresses the prompt. While the student attempts to introduce the causes of global starvation such as overpopulation and inflation, these ideas are left underdeveloped due to the premature ending of the essay. According to the task achievement band descriptors, an incomplete response that fails to reach the word count and cuts off mid-sentence cannot achieve a score above Band 4.0. To improve, the student must ensure they write at least 250 words, fully developing each body paragraph with specific explanations and relevant examples.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text begins with a reasonably clear introduction that states the topic and outlines the essay structure. The opening sentence attempts to use cohesive devices such as 'despite of' and 'Although'. However, because the text cuts off mid-sentence ('people are fac'), overall progression and paragraphing are severely hindered. There is only a single incomplete body paragraph, making it impossible to evaluate full essay organisation and logical sequencing across multiple paragraphs. Based on the limited language produced, the organizational structure aligns with a Band 4.0, as information is cut off and left unarranged.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used in the snippet shows some attempt at appropriate topic-related terms, such as 'starvation', 'inflation', 'overpopulation', and 'resourses'. However, there are noticeable lexical errors, notably the misspelling of 'resourses' and the awkward phrase 'huge development in the farming field'. The range of vocabulary is quite basic and limited due to the short length of the text. Because communication is momentarily strained by the incomplete ending and minor inaccuracies, the lexical resource fits the Band 5.0 descriptor profile.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The student attempts some complex structures, such as concession clauses ('Although the main reasons are...') and relative clauses ('...while the resourses are declining which is leading to...'). However, there are grammatical errors present, such as 'despite of' (instead of 'despite' or 'in spite of') and punctuation/run-on issues in the final incomplete sentence. Because the text is only 75 words long and trails off incomplete, the range of grammatical structures is very limited, and control is inconsistent. This corresponds to a Band 4.5.
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