Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In agriculture,millions of people around the world still sufer from hunger. The reasons,Poverty,War and conflict,unequal of food distrubtion,climate change. In my opinion, Government needs to support farmers by financail support and food assistance for poor famlies.

For example,in USA,NETERLANDS this type of countires having advanced technologies and also goverment support farmers by financail.

Therefore, Government need to take action on it and give support to farmers and help the poor peoples. Main solution,Government need to provide modren technolgy and reduce water waste and also support poor farmers and also we need to improve food distrubtion,also deal with climate change.From my experience,many farmers in my area face problems because their don't have modren equipments and also lack of water we need to provide them and modren equipments and food disturbtion so they can improved own life.And we all know that in over socitery have lack of problem shortage of water,shortage of modren technology or many others problems we were faced due to these type problems or many others reasons farmers were faced these problems thats why there were sleeping hunger.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task only partially and falls well short of the minimum length requirement, containing only 179 words instead of the required 250. While the writer attempts to answer both parts of the prompt by listing causes of hunger such as poverty and climate change, and suggesting solutions like government support and technology, the ideas are presented in a very limited, list-like manner without proper extension or support. The position is discernible, but the lack of development and the severe under-length issue prevent the response from achieving a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation visible in the attempt to separate ideas, but the overall progression lacks clarity and logical flow. Paragraphing is highly fragmented and ineffective, particularly with the single-sentence paragraphs and run-on sections like 'Main solution, Government need to provide...'. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or inaccurate, and referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of thought smoothly from one point to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, showing a limited range that is only minimally adequate for the task. There are numerous noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word form, such as 'sufer' instead of suffer, 'distrubtion' instead of distribution, 'financail' instead of financial, and 'modren' instead of modern. These lexical inadequacies and frequent spelling mistakes cause some difficulty for the reader and restrict the score to this band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical structures used are very limited in range, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and article usage, such as 'in USA, NETERLANDS this type of countires having' and 'their don't have modren equipments'. Subject-verb agreement and prepositions also show persistent inaccuracies. These frequent errors distract the reader and occasionally obscure the intended meaning of the sentences.

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