Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The Agriculture is being Advanced day by day and improvements are oftenly coming but lot of peoples are still remain hungry because the lack of food and resources . The main cause is world population is increasing in the huge numbers and resources are being short at some places most times due to lack of water and required seeds farmers cant harvited the good crops so food is not coming in sufficient quantity thats the reason why peoples arw still hungry when agriculture is improved day by day .

Yeah thats great if i talk about about how this probelm can be resolve so according to small mind and less creative thoughts . The Responsible Persons should take step in it and provide the good instruments and enough resources to farmer for the grow the best and high Quality crops in good Quantity .

Water is biggest and one of the significant for the fields so if the farmers and peoples get the water and enough seed along with modern and good equipments like tractors which can havited the crops in less time as compare to human body and its really possible in this current modern world so everyone from us should step in the matter and try our much better efforts and sacrifice for the society so our enviroments and peoples around us will be good and healthy .

Also we need to provide some seeds and Prouducts to farmers so by this way problem could be resolve and. done

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions: you identify population growth and shortages of water and seeds as reasons for hunger, then suggest providing farmers with resources and equipment. These points are relevant, but the explanation remains limited and some claims are unclear. For example, the link between population growth and food shortages is asserted rather than explained, and the proposed support from “Responsible Persons” is not specified. The final sentence repeats the idea of supplying seeds and products without adding a distinct solution. To strengthen the response, explain how each cause contributes to hunger and develop practical measures—for instance, improving irrigation, storage, or food distribution—with a relevant example. A clearer, consistent position would also help the reader follow your answer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation: the opening discusses causes, and later paragraphs turn to possible solutions. However, progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are packed into long, loosely connected sentences, and the final paragraph ends abruptly. Connectors such as “so,” “also,” and “because” are repeated or used where the relationship between ideas is not clear. The phrase “Yeah thats great if i talk about about how this probelm can be resolve” also interrupts the formal flow rather than introducing the solution section clearly. Use separate paragraphs for causes and solutions, give each paragraph one main point, and link sentences with precise transitions such as “One reason is…” and “To address this…”.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your response includes relevant topic vocabulary, including “resources,” “seeds,” “crops,” “farmers,” and “tractors,” so the reader can identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “resources are being short,” “harvited the good crops,” and “high Quality crops in good Quantity.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “prob el m,” “enviroments,” and “Prouducts” also reduce clarity. Aim for accurate, natural phrases rather than repeating general words such as “good” and “enough.” Learning topic collocations for food production and distribution will help you express your ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, but control is limited, and frequent errors can make the reader work to understand the message. For example, “many people… still remain hungry because the lack of food” needs a clearer clause structure, while “farmers cant… so food is not coming” combines several ideas without reliable sentence boundaries. There are also problems with articles, agreement, verb forms, and punctuation, as in “Water is biggest” and “how this problem can be resolve.” Most sentences rely on basic patterns, and attempts at more complex structures are often faulty. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine related ideas using accurate clauses and check verb forms, articles, and punctuation.

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