Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In the present time,many types of agriculture items are come to helping to a farmer for full fill their needs . this modification can get some individual hungry.the cause of that is many types machine and pesticides.which gave effect on development of a nation.

To commence with causes , one of most major cause was machine because machine are done work of a people on ten minutes ,but a man can done that work in a day which are useful for a garmer however not a labour . when a person not do work for family then its family growth not gone properly furthermore country devlopment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies a possible cause—mechanisation reducing work for agricultural labourers—and links unemployment to family hardship and national development. This is relevant to the question, but the explanation is brief and difficult to follow, and the essay does not explain other reasons why people remain hungry despite agricultural advances. Most importantly, it does not answer the second part: no measures are proposed. The response is also substantially below the required minimum length, leaving too little space to develop and support its ideas. To improve, address both questions directly, explain how each cause leads to hunger, and suggest practical responses such as income support, food distribution, or access to employment, with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and then using “To commence with” to introduce a cause. The ideas about machines, lost work, and family hardship are connected in a basic way. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the opening makes an unclear claim and the second paragraph combines several points in one long sentence. Linking expressions such as “furthermore” do not clarify the relationship between ideas, and there is no paragraph addressing solutions or a conclusion. Use a clear paragraph for each main point, and connect sentences with precise cause-and-effect links so the reader can follow the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts topic-related vocabulary, including “agriculture,” “pesticides,” “development,” and “labour,” and it tries to express ideas about mechanisation and employment. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unclear, as in “agriculture items,” “full fill their needs,” and “machine are done work of a people.” Spelling and word forms also weaken clarity, for example “garmer” and “devlopment.” These errors make it hard to understand some claims, rather than merely making the style less natural. Build a more reliable set of phrases for this topic, such as “agricultural production,” “farm workers,” and “lose their livelihoods,” and check spelling and collocations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer cause-and-effect sentences, including a clause beginning “when a person not do work for family.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but sentence structures are frequently inaccurate, and the reader has to infer the intended meaning. Examples include “many types of agriculture items are come,” “machine are done work,” and “its family growth not gone properly,” which show problems with verb forms, agreement, and sentence construction. Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, particularly around commas and full stops. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then add subordinate clauses—for example, “When farm workers lose their jobs, their families may struggle to afford food.”

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