Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

in the spite of the advanced made in agriculture many of indivisual still hungry around the world.

Because there are some different reasons happend on different area so its depend which country or city we are talking about .

So one of the main reason behind that is to having low knowlage about current situation and have no ideas regarding how to invest samrtly.people have no idea how to boost there agriculture issues.

but another reason is on some areas to face the issues of less water also soil problem so they face this hunger. many of indivisuals work so hard and not getting good response this is really hurtfull.

a good example of this would be i experience in my own country we have been produced a good amount of fruits and vegies although we facing low income and hunger in some areas because of taxes and expensive agriculture system.it should not overlook its potential drabacks.

in my prospective government of every country should must e take a positive steps for whole country and making things more reliable for every0ne.the make every thing smooth all over the world.

so

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify relevant causes, including limited knowledge about improving agriculture, water shortages and soil problems, and you attempt to give a personal example involving fruit and vegetable production in your country. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the causes are mentioned briefly rather than explained, and the proposed solution—government taking positive steps and making things more reliable—is too vague to show what should actually be done. The example about taxes and expensive farming is difficult to connect clearly to the causes or solutions. The response is also 60 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop both parts of the question. Explain each cause and propose specific measures, such as irrigation investment or support for small farmers.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to move from causes to an example and then to a solution, and phrases such as “one of the main reason” and “but another reason” signal a change in ideas. However, the information is not arranged coherently enough for the reader to follow the argument consistently. The opening is followed by a broad statement about different areas, while the example and the government recommendation are not clearly linked to the preceding points. Several ideas run together in long sentences, and the final “so” leaves the response unfinished. Use separate paragraphs for causes, the example, and solutions; then connect each point with clear references and complete transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “agriculture,” “soil,” “taxes,” and “low income,” so the reader can identify the general subject. There are also attempts to express more specific ideas, such as “invest smartly” and “boost their agriculture.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the meaning difficult to interpret, including “current situation,” “good response,” and “potential drabacks.” Repetition of “issues” and “hunger” also reduces precision. Build a more accurate set of phrases for food insecurity and farming, and check spelling and collocations. For example, use “agricultural productivity” rather than “boost their agriculture,” and specify what kind of government support you mean.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine ideas using clauses, for example, “although we facing low income and hunger,” and it includes some simple statements that convey the general topic. However, sentence structures are limited, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur frequently enough to make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “many of indivisual still hungry,” “one of the main reason … is to having,” and “the make every thing smooth.” The opening also lacks a clear, correctly formed sentence structure. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with correct verb forms—for instance, “Although the country produces fruit and vegetables, some regions still experience hunger because food is unaffordable.”

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