Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The agrifood sector continues to break new grounds in regards to the production of food. Global starvation, however, still abounds greatly.

I would like to first note that development in the agricultural sector does not equal abundance - or even availability or accessibility - of food for the masses. This is because food is not free anywhere in the world. The rise in capitalists in the food business means that the cost of food increases whenever production sets new precedents in regards to advancement. As a result, many consumers find themselves being priced out of purchase and have to starve. In Nigeria, the introduction of machine grown food in 2025 resulted to unprecendented levels of costly food in a country where over 67% of its citzens live in multidimensional poverty.

There needs to be a development of regulatory checks by governments of the world. These checks needs to focus on the agricultural sector and ensure that no level of technological growth stops the masses from being able to afford a day's meal. There must also be a development of state-owned agricultural businesses that give food out or subsidise it for their citizens - the differences or losses incurred can be covered by each state's agricultural budget. This will take away the monopoly from private sectors and leave them with no choice to bring exorbitant prices down. In my opinion, their hands must be forced. In socialist China, this method has effectively worked.

Food should be freely given or readily accessible to even the poorest of the poor. I believe that a society that solely depends on capitalists for food will never not have hungry people. Therefore, governments must take individual or collective action to revoke power from agricultural capitalists; in doing so, they end hunger globally and earn the gratitude of the masses.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response addresses both questions and maintains a clear position: it links hunger to affordability and market power, then proposes government regulation, subsidies, and state-owned agricultural businesses. The Nigeria example and reference to China help make the argument more concrete. This meets the task well overall, but the explanation is narrower than the question allows: it treats rising food prices as the main cause and gives little attention to other factors such as conflict, distribution failures, or climate-related crop losses. Some proposals also need fuller explanation—for example, how state businesses would ensure food reaches people who need it. Developing a broader range of causes and supporting each solution more specifically would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph explaining a cause, a paragraph proposing measures, and a concluding position. The progression from affordability to government intervention is easy to follow, and linking phrases such as “As a result,” “There must also be,” and “Therefore” help signal relationships between ideas. However, the connections are sometimes mechanical, and the final paragraph largely repeats the call to reduce the power of agricultural capitalists rather than extending the argument. References such as “this method” could also be more precise about which policy is meant. To strengthen cohesion, vary the ways ideas are linked and use the conclusion to synthesise the causes and solutions rather than restating them.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

The response uses an adequate range of topic-related vocabulary, including “agricultural sector,” “multidimensional poverty,” “subsidise,” “monopoly,” and “exorbitant prices.” These choices allow the writer to express a clear argument and show some willingness to use less common language. At times, however, phrasing is imprecise or collocationally awkward: “break new grounds,” “in regards to,” and “priced out of purchase” do not sound natural in this context. There are also spelling errors in “unprecendented” and “citzens.” More accurate collocations and careful proofreading would improve precision and fluency; for instance, describe advances as “breaking new ground” and consumers as being “priced out of the market.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The essay includes a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “businesses that give food out” and a conditional structure in “whenever production sets new precedents.” Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “These checks needs to focus” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the introduction … resulted to” uses an incorrect preposition within the verb pattern. The construction “will never not have hungry people” is also awkward and makes the intended meaning less direct. Review agreement, verb patterns, and negative constructions, and proofread punctuation and sentence boundaries. Greater accuracy across these structures would help the range already attempted feel more controlled.

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