Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Todays, in spite of the advances made in agriculture, some humans around the world still go hungry. This essay will discuss the main causes of this problem and suggest some solutions.

On the one hand, many people still suffer from hunger. Firstly, the problem is this time on the world most problem is advances made in agriculture because many people do farming but yield grains has not to sell by marcket and farmers are do not earn money that is a problem then many humans around the world still go humgry. Furthermore, climate change crops are destroyed due to excessive rainfall." than many persons problems are go hungry.

On the other hand, this case solution is on the other city humans are help withe the farmers. secondally, humans can do farming and this yield grains need to be transported to other cities.Than humans are do not damage to be yield grains altough if food is left over, give it to the poor, example: many humans are westing the food then they throw away food although people has not westing to be food then many people do noy go hungry.

In conclusion, i thing this eassy has right because this time many humans problemls are not eating food then they are die, furthermore some humans do not westing food and they are grow the yield grains this problems are almost solve and very common problrm has climate change because climate has most important to be farming bu some time crops are destoyed due to excessive rainfall.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify hunger as the issue and attempt to answer both questions: you mention low farmer earnings and crops damaged by excessive rainfall as causes, then suggest transporting surplus produce and giving leftover food to people in need. However, these points are difficult to follow and are not explained with clear cause-and-effect reasoning or relevant examples. The response therefore addresses the task only minimally: for instance, it is unclear how advances in agriculture lead to farmers being unable to sell their grain, and the proposed solutions are not developed. The conclusion repeats ideas rather than clearly summarising a supported answer. The response is 247 words, three words below the required minimum; the eight words copied from the prompt are not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signposted by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. These paragraph divisions show an attempt to organise causes separately from solutions. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and linking phrases are sometimes mechanical or confusing. For example, “Firstly” is followed by a long, tangled explanation, while “Furthermore” introduces climate damage without a clear connection to the preceding point. The sentence beginning “Than humans…” is also difficult to connect to the proposed transport solution. To improve, give each paragraph a clear central point, use shorter sentences, and make the relationship between each cause, explanation, and solution explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “agriculture,” “farmers,” “yield grains,” “climate change,” “excessive rainfall,” and “left over.” This gives the response a basic range relevant to the topic. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often inaccurate or unclear, which makes the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Examples include “humans are westing the food,” “this time on the world most problem,” and “yield grains has not to sell by marcket.” Spelling errors such as “humgry,” “eassy,” and “destoyed” also weaken clarity. Build a reliable set of topic phrases and check collocations: for example, say that crops are “damaged by heavy rainfall” and that farmers “struggle to sell their produce.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the response includes basic sequencing structures such as “Firstly” and “Furthermore.” However, grammatical control is weak: errors in sentence construction, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation occur frequently and sometimes obscure meaning. For example, “many people do farming but yield grains has not to sell” has problems with clause structure and agreement, while “farmers are do not earn money” uses an incorrect verb pattern. The final sentence also combines several ideas without clear grammatical boundaries. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then join related ideas with one clear subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement, verb forms after auxiliaries, and sentence boundaries before adding more complex structures.

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