Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the modern world the population is increasing day after day, currenty there are approximately 8 billion individuals in the world and food is necessary for everyone to stay alive. Although there are multiple techniques developed to get high yeild from agriculture but still people around the world facing starvation. There are multiple reasons due to which this happens such as unstability or civil war in some areas and lack of an insfrastructure and this problem can be overcome by help of nations around the world.

To begin with, in many countries of Africa where civil war is on going like Sudan and somilia, there people unable to have a proper meal a day as crops are destroyed by movements of heavy vehicles. For instance, in countries like Sudan and Somalia people are facing hunger because most of the food supplied there is looted by mafias and non-state actors. In addition, some people who try to cultivate crops there are either destroyed in the movements during fights or never groe due to lack of fertilizers and water for irrigation.

The possible steps can be take to handdle these problems are by making a organization with the help of developed countries around the world to release fund for the help of these people. For example, an organization like United Nation can be effective to take some measure to construct an insfrastructure in the regions where people face hunger and starvation. And important step is to bring peace in these unstable nations.

To sum up, lack of agriculture skills and civil war are the main reasons that are starving the people, and by making a collective body these challenges can be overcome and pave a road toward better world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions by identifying conflict and weak agricultural support as causes, then proposing international funding, infrastructure and peace-building. The examples of Sudan and Somalia make the discussion relevant, and your overall response is clear. However, some points are asserted rather than explained: for example, you mention food being looted and crops being damaged, but do not show how these factors combine to leave communities without reliable supplies. The solutions are also less fully developed than the causes; explain what infrastructure or funding would provide, such as irrigation, storage or secure transport. The reference to a lack of agricultural skills appears only in the conclusion and is not developed in the essay. More balanced explanation and support would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for causes and solutions, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with,” “In addition,” and “To sum up” help readers follow the main stages of the argument. This coherent arrangement meets the expected standard, and the ideas generally progress logically. To make the flow more polished, avoid relying on formulaic transitions and connect related points more explicitly. For instance, the paragraph on conflict moves from damaged crops to looting and then to irrigation without clearly showing how these problems relate. The phrase “these problems” in the solutions paragraph could also refer more precisely to the specific causes. Clearer links and more precise referencing would strengthen cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “starvation,” “civil war,” “irrigation,” “fertilizers,” and “non-state actors,” which helps communicate the subject. There is also some attempt to use more formal language, such as “collective body” and “construct an infrastructure.” However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural combinations are noticeable, including “currenty,” “yeild,” “insfrastructure,” “handdle,” and “pave a road toward.” Some choices, such as “movements of heavy vehicles,” do not clearly express the intended idea. Aim for accurate spelling and natural collocations, and choose precise terms for the mechanisms causing hunger. This would make the vocabulary more reliable and easier to interpret.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a concessive opening with “Although” and a relative clause in “regions where people face hunger and starvation.” These structures show some range, and the main message is generally understandable. However, some errors in sentence construction and verb forms remain. For example, “Although there are multiple techniques … but still” incorrectly combines two contrasting structures; use “Although …, people still…” instead. In “people around the world facing starvation,” the main verb is missing, while “The possible steps can be take” needs the passive form “can be taken.” There are also issues with articles and agreement, as in “an organization” followed by “a organization.” Review complete clause structure, verb forms and article use to improve accuracy.

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