Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Technoglogy has made a-lot of changes in the stream of agriculture. Yet many people around the world still go hungry and this is the biggest problem specially in the some African countries.

The most concerning and the challenging part, which is witnessed by many countries in the history is food scarcity. Many scientists had contributed to solve the problem of scarcity and proposed the solution like cross breading and multi-farming techniques and these were one of the most successful ways in eradicating the problem of food scarcity in the Europe, Australia and some parts of Asia.

Moreover, many government has taken some major steps to reduce to food scarcity problem in the world but when it comes to some parts of africa the problem remains stagnant because the land fertility is also one of the biggest problem in those countries and this has been a challenging part both for the government and the citizens. Many African countries are trying both horizontal and vertical farming to meet the solution as quick as possible. Although, many countries are providing free food suplies to these African countries to ensure that everyone gets food in a appropriate manner. Furthermore, Many scientist around the world are trying to teach some advance technology specially in the agriculture sector so that farmars can produce the enough quantity to fullfill the need.

In conclusion, countries who produces food in more than enough quantity should help to those countries as well as scientist around the world should teach the advance concept and technology to produce the food in enough quantity

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you identify land fertility and food scarcity as causes, and suggest farming methods, food aid, and agricultural training as responses. These ideas are relevant, but the explanation is limited and some claims are unclear. For example, you mention that fertility is a problem in parts of Africa without explaining what causes it or how it affects food production; the proposed “horizontal and vertical farming” is also not explained. The response gives little specific support or example, and the conclusion mainly repeats the proposed solutions rather than drawing the causes and responses together. Develop each main point with a clear explanation and a relevant example, and make the relationship between agricultural advances and continuing hunger more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Although,” and “In conclusion” help signal movement between points. However, progression is not consistently clear: the second paragraph focuses on past solutions, while the next combines government action, soil fertility, farming methods, food aid and training in one long paragraph. “Although” introduces a clause that does not form a complete contrast, and “these African countries” has an unclear reference. Group causes together and then organise solutions in a separate paragraph, using links that show the precise relationship between ideas. This would make the overall argument easier to follow and reduce the sense of a list.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “food scarcity,” “land fertility,” “vertical farming” and “agriculture sector,” so the reader can understand the general subject. There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “eradicating” and “stagnant,” but some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “cross breading” appears to mean “cross-breeding,” and “meet the solution” does not express the intended idea clearly. Spelling errors such as “Technoglogy,” “suplies” and “farmars” are noticeable, while repeated use of “problem” and “food” limits variety. Build accuracy with common collocations and proofread spelling; use precise terms for causes and practical interventions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a relative clause (“which is witnessed by many countries”) and a conditional-style phrase (“when it comes to some parts of africa”). However, complex structures are often not controlled, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to process. For example, “many government has taken” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “the land fertility is also one of the biggest problem” has article, number and agreement problems. The sentence beginning “Although, many countries are providing…” is a fragment, and the final sentence has an unclear construction (“should help to those countries”). Practise accurate sentence boundaries, agreement, articles and plural forms, then check each longer sentence for a complete main clause.

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