Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

todays world agriculture spite of advance but globle hunger has become predominantly serious concernes . this Eassy will outline the mian problem why today agriculture are to much upgraded but globle hunger still increasing. associated with this issue and suggest practical ways to address them.

One Significant problem is wars and a failed government system and transport issues that major reasons today globle hunger. because when countries war each other and its create major impact on importe and small impact on internal transport system of country. on the other side some countries that do not have recorses to fulfil their production of food and those countrys are disconnected with the world like some affrican countries and other reason is that a failed government system when a government failed their system even high production of this country but some bussines man are control supply and demand of the market thats why prices are too high and some pover people cant afford.

their are some solution of world hunger problem and world leader need should actionto face the problem. gernment should control markets and make strict law on prices of markets are control. and major countries responilbty in production of transport which those countrys that are dissconnected the world help in agriclutre field. wolrd heath orgnization need help those people are area where food transport are quilety low they should hlep there first of all world leader should action on this because its to much serious concernes and they should fulfil their needs.

In conclusion, Transport and bussines tiquen that control prices of market can have serious consequences, but it could be reduced through if government take action on this make transport eaiser and make strict law on pricess of market

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions by identifying causes such as war, weak government, transport disruption and poverty, then proposing market regulation and assistance to disconnected regions. This is relevant to the task, and the conclusion returns to government action. However, the explanation is only partly developed: for example, you mention that war affects imports and transport but do not explain how this leads to food shortages or why agricultural advances fail to reach people. The proposed roles for governments, major countries and the World Health Organization are also difficult to distinguish and need clearer, specific actions. A more explicit central answer and developed examples would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has an overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on solutions and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic route through the answer. Within paragraphs, however, ideas are often joined in long, unclear sequences, as in the discussion beginning “because when countries war each other,” where war, transport, resources and government control are combined without clear transitions. Linking phrases such as “on the other side” and “and other reason” are sometimes awkward or do not show the relationship precisely. The conclusion also repeats earlier points rather than clearly synthesising them. Separate each cause and solution into focused sentences, and use clear references and transitions to show how each idea connects.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “production,” “supply and demand,” “transport system” and “strict law,” so the reader can identify the main subject and some key concepts. However, the range is limited and several word choices, collocations and spellings make meaning harder to follow. Phrases such as “business man are control supply and demand” and “transport are quilety low” are not expressed naturally, while repeated use of “problem,” “serious” and “countries” limits precision. Spelling errors such as “globle,” “recorses” and “affrican” also reduce clarity. Build a bank of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and word forms; for instance, use “food distribution” and “affordable food prices.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “when” and “because.” This shows an effort to explain causes rather than relying only on short statements. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles and verb forms can make the relationships between ideas difficult to understand. For example, “when countries war each other and its create major impact” lacks a correct verb pattern and has unclear agreement; “some business man are control” also has an incorrect verb construction. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are inconsistent, particularly in the long cause paragraph. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then add one clearly controlled subordinate clause at a time.

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