Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In respect to the advances made in agriculture, many people around the people still go hungary as it leads to increase financial cost but valuable for social economy.

Advanced agriculture leads to increased financial cost in the crops. With the use of technology, process of agriculture got more easier but also expensive. The farmers that were using simple harvesting method are now using the advanced equipment. To balance their investment and making the profit out of it, the prices got higher from one's capability.

Further more advanced agriculture results into good social economy. The government is benefited out of it too, the farmers are also at the good side. The social and financial economy of the country is better.

however, the social economy are not making the financial rise in the people's salaries.The increase price of crops will make the survival difficult. The government needs too keep the balance between the adavance agriculture and people finanical stability. The policies and discounts offer should be established for the people. By keeping the social economy and person's economy on mind will lead to further good socio-economical progress.

In conclusion, advances in agriculture should concide with the changes in the policies too. The policies will be beneficial for the communities whereas the advances in agriculture will be profitable to the businesman and the government byside.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify a relevant possible cause—higher production costs from modern equipment—and suggest government policies or discounts as a response. However, the task is only partially addressed: the explanation that higher crop prices make food unaffordable is brief, and the claim that agriculture improves the economy is not clearly connected to why people remain hungry. The proposed measures are also general, with no explanation of how they would reach hungry households or improve access to food. The response contains 213 words, below the required 250; the nine words copied from the prompt are not counted. Develop both causes and solutions with specific explanation and an example, such as how targeted food support could help low-income families.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: it introduces the issue, discusses costs and economic benefits, proposes government action, and concludes. This gives the reader some organisation. However, progression between ideas is not always clear. For example, “Further more advanced agriculture results into good social economy” shifts from the cost explanation without showing how this relates to hunger, and the later contrast beginning “however” is not clearly developed. Linking phrases such as “In conclusion” help signal stages, but some are awkward or mechanically used, and references such as “it” and “the social economy” can be unclear. Build each paragraph around one main point and use explicit cause-and-effect links to connect it to the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “advanced equipment,” “harvesting method,” “financial stability,” and “policies,” so the reader can recognise the subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural choices make parts difficult to interpret, such as “good social economy,” “the prices got higher from one's capability,” and “by keeping the social economy and person's economy on mind.” Spelling errors, including “hungary,” “adavance,” and “finanical,” also reduce clarity. Aim for precise phrases that describe food access and affordability, and check spelling and collocations carefully. For instance, explain that higher production costs may be passed on to consumers through increased food prices.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures, including “To balance their investment and making the profit out of it, the prices got higher…” However, complex constructions are often faulty, and frequent errors can make relationships between ideas hard to follow. Examples include “With the use of technology, process of agriculture got more easier,” “the social economy are not making,” and “The government needs too keep.” Articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries need more consistent control. Try building accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb, then add one subordinate clause where useful—for example, “Because modern machinery is expensive, farmers may raise prices to recover their investment.”

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