Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Despite the developments in agriculture, there are still countless number of people around the globe who are living without proper food. This is a true concern. We can take some steps to eradicate this issue .

One thing which I personally believe is the increase in population of the world. For instance, let's narrow it down to our own country, Pakistan , when it was getting independence in 1947, it was having a roughly population of 70 million people. Now the population is 236 millions. What does this data tell us. This data shows that if agriculture is developed and production is increased, so are the consumers. Same is the case with agricultural lands. The agricultural lands are quickly occupying by housing societies and the space for growing crops is getting less.

The other cause which I feel is so prominent is the inequalities present in our societies. The total wealth of the world is in the hands of few chosen people and they control the world. So, everyone do not have similar opportunity to get something to eat. Governments and states are also responsible for this. This is the responsibility of any welfare state to arrange food for it's people. Some other reasons can also be counted down. The world is always in turmoil and in wars. Food export or even food crops are severely disturbed with these things.

So, agriculture is boosted but we still see people deprived of proper foods because of these reasons. When wealth is distributed equally, when every one is given the opportunity to grow. We can cope with the situation up to large extent and number of hungry people will dramatically fall.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions by identifying population growth, unequal access to wealth, government responsibility, and conflict as causes, then proposing fairer distribution and opportunities as responses. The Pakistan population figures provide a relevant example, and your position—that agricultural progress alone cannot end hunger—is clear. However, the solutions are less fully developed than the causes: “when wealth is distributed equally” and “when every one is given the opportunity to grow” are broad proposals, with little explanation of how governments or communities could implement them. The discussion of land being taken over by housing is relevant but could be linked more explicitly to food supply and hunger. Develop one or two practical measures and explain their likely impact to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on population and land, a paragraph on inequality and conflict, and a concluding summary. Sequencing phrases such as “One thing,” “The other cause,” and “So” help readers follow the main points. However, these links are somewhat mechanical, and the final paragraph moves quickly from causes to solutions without a clear transition or developed explanation. Some references are also unclear, as in “these things,” which could refer to turmoil, wars, or both. Use more precise links between cause and effect, and organise the proposed actions in a distinct, developed section. This would make the progression smoother while preserving the clear paragraph structure already present.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “agriculture,” “production,” “agricultural lands,” “inequalities,” “welfare state,” and “food export.” These terms make the subject clear, and phrases such as “deprived of proper foods” show an attempt to express the issue in varied language. Some choices are inaccurate or unnatural, however: “countless number” is redundant, “agricultural lands are quickly occupying” does not express the intended meaning, and “reasons can also be counted down” is not an idiomatic phrase. “Dramatically fall” is understandable but less precise than a phrase describing a reduction in hunger. Aim for natural collocations and check word forms so that your vocabulary communicates ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex structures, including conditional clauses in “When wealth is distributed equally…” and a relative clause in “This is the responsibility of any welfare state…” The main ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. For example, “it was having a roughly population” has an incorrect verb construction and article, while “The agricultural lands are quickly occupying” uses the wrong passive form. There are also agreement and sentence-boundary problems in “everyone do not have similar opportunity” and “What does this data tell us. This data shows…”. Review subject–verb agreement, articles and plurals, and distinguish questions from statements with punctuation. More accurate control of these patterns would strengthen your varied sentence attempts.

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