Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In these days with the modern agriculture and farming still the population of the world are hungry. it has a lot of concerns like the majority of the farmer are lack of adavnce machinary and only the developed country have excess to use the modern agariculture equipments and machines.

In recent years the modern technology have played greater role in the agriculture and farming. Peoples around the world nowdays are mostly accupied by modern technology for their agriculture, it has a lot of advantages likewise they save thier time of work for instance a single machine compare with work acountability can do the work of fifty work in a same time. Moreover, the advance machinary are capable to do the work in a well and great way instead of worker, for example new technology have a modern techniques in farming and agriculture.

Although, the advancement in the agriculture are doing well, but there are some negative concequences to be keep in mind. In todays world some new inovations are come across which have greater impact on hungriness of the people around the world, likewise the over use of pescticides which also play role in the declination of overall foods stuffs. Furthermore, the variety of the seeds are also a greeat concern in overall crops rotaion for instance a good variety seeds give more products than the low variety. additionally some farmer have old techniques to use in agriculture which can effect the farming.

In conclusion, the modern technology play a greater role in the agriculture which make the farming easier, but there are some old techniques of the farmer and the low qualities seeds are of great concern which lower the overall products which effect the people of the world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant causes, including unequal access to modern machinery, pesticide overuse, seed quality, and farmers continuing to use older methods. However, the response only partially answers the question: it does not clearly explain how these factors lead to people going hungry, and the discussion of modern technology’s benefits takes up space without directly addressing the causes of hunger. The second part of the task is not answered with practical measures; the conclusion repeats concerns about seeds and old techniques rather than explaining what governments, communities, or farmers could do. To strengthen the response, develop a clear explanation of the causes and propose specific solutions, such as improving access to equipment, training, or reliable seed varieties, with examples showing how these could reduce food shortages.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an opening, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphs also group related points, such as technology’s benefits and concerns about pesticides and seeds. However, the overall progression is not consistently clear: the second paragraph focuses on advantages of modern farming, while the task asks why hunger persists, and the final paragraph repeats earlier points rather than bringing the argument to a clear resolution. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Although,” and “Furthermore” are used, but some connections are mechanical or unclear, and “Although” is followed by “but.” Improve cohesion by making each paragraph serve a distinct purpose and using clear references to show how each cause contributes to hunger and how proposed actions address it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “modern technology,” “pesticides,” “variety of the seeds,” and “crops rotation.” This gives the response a basic range for discussing agriculture. However, errors in spelling, word form, and collocation are noticeable and sometimes make ideas difficult to interpret, as in “hungriness,” “work accountability,” and “low qualities seeds.” Several expressions are also repeated, particularly “modern technology” and “agriculture and farming,” limiting precision. Aim to use accurate topic-specific phrases and check spelling carefully. For example, describe “limited access to machinery” rather than “lack of advance machinary,” and use “crop yields” when discussing the amount of food produced. More precise vocabulary would help clarify your explanations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including examples introduced with “for instance” and a contrast beginning “Although.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries occur frequently. For example, “the population of the world are hungry” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “the modern technology have played” uses an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “Although, the advancement…” is also incorrectly joined with “but.” These errors can make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected supporting clause, and check that subjects and verbs agree. Also review punctuation and avoid joining complete ideas with commas alone.

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