Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In spite of remarkable advances in agriculture technology, world hunger remain a serious problem. While in modern farming produces more food than ever before, milions of peoples still go hungry, these eassy,

There are many advance technology are added in the agriculture and these technology help to all farmers produce more food and vegetables, but the question is that after the technology they helps to produce more food and vegetables but why many people around the world still go hungry.

There are severals reason behind this problem, the major reason is unequal distribution, not lack of production. Today yje world produces enough food for feed everyone, but food is not distributed evenly. In many developing countries, poor infrastructure, lack of shortage facilities, and inefficient tranport mean that food rots before transport.Fourtermore poverty is a key factor, even when food are not avaliable.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify two relevant causes—unequal food distribution and poverty—and explain that poor infrastructure can lead to food spoiling before it is transported. However, the response addresses only the first question and gives no measures to solve the problem, so the task is covered only minimally. The causes are also briefly stated rather than developed with specific examples or fuller explanation. The response contains 134 words, which is 116 words below the required minimum; this leaves too little space to answer both questions adequately. To improve, explain the causes in more depth, propose practical actions such as improving storage and transport or providing targeted food assistance, and support these ideas with relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening introduces the issue, followed by a paragraph about agricultural technology and another that identifies causes. The progression is difficult to follow, however, because the first body paragraph repeats the question about why people remain hungry without developing an answer, and the response ends abruptly after mentioning poverty. Connections between ideas are also unclear in places, particularly in the opening, where several clauses run together. Use separate paragraphs for causes and solutions, and make each paragraph develop one main point in a clear sequence. Simple linking phrases such as “One major cause is…” and “To address this…” would help guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “agriculture,” “unequal distribution,” “infrastructure,” and “poverty,” which helps communicate the central causes. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “lack of shortage facilities,” “tranport,” and “food are not avaliable.” Repetition of “produce more food and vegetables” also limits precision. Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing food supply and access, and check spelling carefully. For example, “storage facilities” is clearer than “shortage facilities,” while “food is inaccessible to poor households” expresses the final point more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a contrast with “While” and a sentence explaining that food may spoil before transport. However, control is inconsistent, and frequent errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “world hunger remain” instead of “world hunger remains,” “there are severals reason,” and “food are not available.” The opening also contains a run-on sentence that joins several ideas with commas, while “While in modern farming produces…” is not a complete, correctly formed clause. Practise subject–verb agreement, singular and plural forms, and complete sentence construction. Use full stops to separate ideas, then check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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