Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, agriculture was developed significantly due to the modern technology. However, many people around the world still suffer from hunger. This essay will discuss the main reasons for this problem and suggest some possible solutions.

The foremost argument to justify my point is that, The main case is that in this period people does not show the interest in the argiculture because the youngers think they can not see their future in agriculture due to the lack of marketing price on crops. However, Thr farmers say they will work and spend their whole days or a month to care of crops and while they harves the crops and sell them in market the prices of crops make them sad due to lack of price. such as the conditions of nation, the price of crops seeds and medicines was high etc.

Futhermore, we can be suggest or inspired genji to work in own country without going to abroad. In this time in agriculture there was a lot of development in tools for example, invented a machine to cut the grass, paddy etc as well as a lot's of chemical or medicine was made to killed insects. Moreover, we can slove this problem by motivated the youngers and inspired them to work on argiculture. People should provide information about agriculture on students books, on newspapers, paste a articles etc. Therefore, In school teacher should make a short presentation about agriculture and took a children in small cultivated area of farming mushroom, chilly, paddy for looked and learn how to pick up them and the process of growing that crops.

In conclusion, Although hunger remains a serious problem, it can be reduced through proper grovernment support and the better food distribution.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you identify low returns for farmers as a reason young people avoid agriculture, and suggest encouraging young people through education and practical school activities. These ideas are relevant, but the explanation of how low crop prices lead to hunger is not made explicit, and the discussion focuses mainly on agricultural employment rather than other causes such as poverty, conflict, or unequal food distribution. The solutions are also unevenly developed: school presentations and visits are described, while the concluding ideas of government support and better distribution are not explained. To strengthen the response, make the link between each cause and hunger clear, then explain how each proposed measure would improve food access or supply.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, a paragraph on a cause, a paragraph on solutions, and a conclusion. Basic signposting such as “However,” “Furthermore,” and “In conclusion” helps readers identify these stages. However, progression within the body paragraphs is difficult to follow because several ideas are crowded together, and some links are unclear—for example, the move from farmers’ low prices to the cost of seeds and medicines. The repeated use of “Moreover” and “Therefore” does not always show the precise relationship between ideas. Organise each paragraph around one main point, use clearer cause-and-effect links, and ensure that the conclusion follows from the solutions actually explained.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “agriculture,” “crops,” “insects,” “food distribution,” and “cultivated area,” so the subject is generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “lack of marketing price on crops,” “inspired genji,” and “took a children in small cultivated area.” Spelling errors, including “argiculture,” “harves,” “Futhermore,” and “slove,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural phrases that express the intended ideas, such as “low prices for crops,” “encourage young people,” and “take students to a small farm.” Proofreading spelling and checking common word combinations would make your message easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast in “Although hunger remains a serious problem” and a relative clause in “the youngers think they can not see their future.” However, complex constructions are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the response difficult to follow. Examples include “people does not show,” “we can be suggest,” and “the prices of crops make them sad”; these show problems with agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction. Tense and article use are also inconsistent, as in “the price of crops seeds and medicines was high.” Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine them using clauses while checking subject–verb agreement, verb patterns, and punctuation.

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