Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is true that despite of the many advances made in agriculture field, numerous individual around through the world still remain hungry. Although it has many reasons, government and public can take many steps to solve this problems.

There are a number of reasons why people still remain hungry. One of the main reason is that lack of knowledge. For example, when a farmer is illiterate and unable to conduct pump machine and other type of agriculture field machine, they cannot produce significant number of crops and delivered it. As a consequence, people cannot receive enough amount of food which causes they may stucked. Another significant reason is that poverty. For instance, by living underpriviliged rate, few public are fail to purchase in food item. As a result, they are unable to afford to buy and may starved day by day.

In addition, some steps can be taken to measure this problem. First of all, governement can increases the rate of literacy. It helps farmers to conduct advanced machine in agriculture field. To cite an example, if literacy rate is inclined in the world, farmers can produce more crops by using modernized machine and individual can plant more vegetable and fruit plants in their balcony and garden of the house. Consequently, crops, vegetable and fruits plantation is rises throughout the world which causes the proportion of starvness is decreases. Moreover, government can extanded the job opportunity. Hence, without producing more job opportunities, people are unable to mitigate their consumption. Therefore, people remain starved.

In conclusion, even though numerous modern technology is invented in agriculture field, people around the world remain hungry for illiteracy and poverty. This problem can minimise take some necessary steps by government and individual.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions by identifying illiteracy and poverty as causes, then proposing education and more job opportunities. These points are relevant, and the examples about farmers’ access to machinery and people’s ability to buy food help explain the causes. However, the solutions are not developed equally: the link between literacy and agricultural output is outlined, while the suggestion to expand employment is only briefly stated and does not explain how this would improve food access. The response also focuses mainly on individual farmers and household poverty, with little discussion of wider factors such as food distribution or conflict. A clearer explanation of how each proposed measure would reduce hunger, supported by more specific examples, would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on solutions, and a conclusion. The reader can follow the main progression from reasons to possible action, and signposts such as “For example,” “As a consequence,” and “In addition” help connect points. However, these linking phrases are sometimes mechanical, and some connections are unclear. For instance, the move from farmers using machinery to individuals planting vegetables in balconies is abrupt, while “Hence” and “Therefore” repeat the same consequence in the employment discussion without developing it. Some references, such as “this problem,” could also be more precise. Grouping related explanations more tightly and making each cause-and-effect link explicit would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “agriculture,” “literacy,” “poverty,” “job opportunity,” and “modernized machine,” and you attempt some less common expressions. However, word choice, collocation, and spelling errors are noticeable and sometimes make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “conduct pump machine,” “underpriviliged rate,” “starvness,” and “mitigate their consumption”; these are not natural or clear ways to express the intended ideas. There is also repetition of basic terms such as “people,” “produce,” and “problem.” Build a more reliable range of topic vocabulary and check spelling and word forms. More precise phrases such as “operate farm machinery,” “low-income households,” and “food insecurity” would help communicate your ideas accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “Although,” “when,” and “if,” so there is some variety in structure. However, many sentences contain errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction, and these sometimes make the meaning hard to interpret. For example, “One of the main reason is that lack of knowledge” has problems with plural agreement and sentence structure; “government can increases” uses an incorrect verb form; and “the proportion of starvness is decreases” has an inaccurate verb construction. The conclusion, “This problem can minimise take some necessary steps,” is also difficult to understand grammatically. Practise forming accurate subject–verb patterns and checking each clause’s verb before attempting longer sentences.

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