Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Introduction

advance techniques are not able to provide suffient food to whole world some areas of the world is still hungry .

Reason

There are to many reasons of this hunger one main reason is inflamation some poor countries are not have resources to pay the price of food to rich countries. Another reason is unnecessary stock of food, and the third reason is wars in the whole world nowadays, and also the life of food is too short due to modern techniques

solution

To over come shortage of food we can follow some steps . The first step is to improve life time of food and second is stop wars in the world by stopping wars we can reduce the price of food at comfortable prices By using this technique, we can kill two sparrows with one stone.

EXAMPLE

When we see past in human history old techniques are better to improve life time of food

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant causes—poverty and inability to afford food, food being stored unnecessarily, and wars—and suggest extending food’s usable life and ending conflict. This shows an attempt to answer both questions. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the causes are listed rather than explained, and the solutions are not clearly linked to the problems. For example, “stop wars” is proposed, but you do not explain how this could be achieved or how it would improve food access. The example about older techniques is unclear and does not support a specific point. The response is also below the required 250 words, leaving too little space to develop and support your ideas. Explain each cause and solution with a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic overall arrangement, with sections labelled “Introduction,” “Reason,” “solution,” and “EXAMPLE,” so the reader can recognise an attempt to separate the main parts. You also use simple sequencing expressions such as “The first step” and “Another reason.” However, ideas do not progress clearly within or between these sections. The causes are crowded into one sentence, and the example appears as a separate, unexplained fragment rather than supporting the solution. Some links are unclear, particularly the connection between stopping wars and making food affordable. Use conventional paragraphs and organise the essay into an introduction, developed cause paragraphs, a solutions paragraph, and a conclusion. Add clear linking sentences that show how each idea relates to the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “resources,” “price of food,” “wars,” and “life time of food,” and the phrase “kill two sparrows with one stone” shows an attempt to use an idiom. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or spellings make the meaning difficult to follow. “Inflamation” does not express the intended cause clearly, while “unnecessary stock of food” and “life of food” are imprecise in this context. The idiom is also informal for an academic essay. Aim for accurate topic-specific expressions such as food insecurity, food distribution, food waste, and preservation. Check spelling and choose collocations that express your intended meaning precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, for example, “There are to many reasons of this hunger” and the sentence listing several causes. However, the range of structures is limited, and errors in sentence formation, agreement, articles, and punctuation frequently make the ideas harder to understand. Examples include “some areas of the world is still hungry,” “some poor countries are not have resources,” and the run-on sequence beginning “Another reason is unnecessary stock of food.” The solution sentence also joins several ideas without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences, then connect them with conjunctions or full stops. For example: “Some countries lack the resources to import food. As a result, many people cannot afford enough to eat.”

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